You were always the Mr. Perfectionist ; ordered and meticulous
but the day you left, you were in such a hurry
that you remembered only to pry away your heart from me,
that you also took away my heart, is of no consequence,
my heart any way was of no use to me
as it was meant to beat only for you (but I digress)
I find signs of you scattered all around
in folded laundry, crammed drawers,
old shoe boxes and the medicine cabinet
the raw hole beneath my ribs where your heart resided
has become a cesspool of aching memories
every time a thought gets snagged on its jagged edge
I begin to unravel…
the unfulfilled dreams still smolder somewhere in my eyes
the unkept promises hang in limbo arms akimbo
unquantifiable desires burn my skin with crackling reminiscences
unrequited love is such a cruel monster
it refuses to heed my plaintive cries for release
knowing you has become such a conundrum for me
whether I continue to hate you or love you
you are always with me
under my skin, in my thoughts
invading every space I inhabit
I await my release.
Wow, that was intense. A very personal example of cognitive dissonance.
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Thank you so much for your insightful comment.
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cesspool of aching memories” “The await of release”- you kept me hooked till the end. I am amazed at the strong feelings it stirred inside of me.
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If it stirred strong feelings, I am humbled. Thanks a lot.
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♥️♥️
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❤️❤️
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Dramatically piercing, and these 4 lines, I felt rattle through my empty heart…….
” you are always with me
under my skin, in my thoughts
invading every space I inhabit
I await my release.”
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Oh Ivor, this means a lot to me! Thank you. 💙
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You wrote it with passion Punam xxx
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😊❤️
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I think Ivor got this one spot on when he described it as “piercing”. Maybe you have to go through a break up with a long term lover to fully appreciate how poignant doing the laundry or opening the medicine cabinet can afterwards be, but your poem, Punam, does an excellent job of capturing that!
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Thank you, Paul. Separation can be so painful, especially when you have spent a long time together.
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Oh WOW, so powerful–and familiar, every word perfect and precise…I’m stunned.
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Thank you so much for your appreciation!
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You are sincerely welcome.
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definitely intensely personal and obviously resonates with many!
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Pain generally resonates!
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sadly so ….
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I felt the heartwrenching ache of that separation. So brutal yet so perfectly expressed ❤️❤️
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Yes, it can be so brutal! Thanks, my dear. ❤️❤️
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Reblogged this on Fae Corps Publishing.
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Thank you kindly.
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Gladly. 💜
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Brilliant 🖤
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Thank you so much.
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No problem 👍 🖤
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Heartbreaking my sweet friend. You expressed pain and love so well. Big hugs. ❤️🌺
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Thank you so much, dear Stella. Grateful for your hugs…hugs back at ya! ❤️🤗
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You’re welcome!:)❤️ and Thank you so much
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You are welcome! ❤️
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The concluding five.. Killer ones.. 😌👌🏼👌🏼💕😘😇
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Thank you so much, dear! 🙏🏼😊💞
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😇💕🤗
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😘😘
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You capture the heartbreak of the one left behind. Tragic.
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Yes, indeed…it is tragic! Thank you kindly for reading.
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My pleasure.
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I can feel your passion. Excellent writing!
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Thank you so much, Eugenia for your appreciation.
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You’re welcome!
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Poignant, and with so much emotion.
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Thank you so much, Sadje.
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You’re welcome dear
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That ache, that cruel monster – potent emotions Punam.
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Oh yeah, truly crippling! Thanks a lot, Paul.
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My pleasure – I think 🙂
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I ache for my release ……sigh …. . It so beautifully sums up the emotion behind the entire verse ….. Gorgeous
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Thank you so much, dear Sakshu for your kind appreciation. ❤️
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My pleasure 😊
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interesting write up on the prompts, which come a bit too late, but then unrequited love has been given the license to go overboard, in literature that is 🙂
on the other hand, these lovers never seem to be trying hard for their release, as in the case here
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Lovers are losers, isn’t it! Unrequited love does have the license to go overboard, but this is hardly literature!
Is it late? 🤔 I don’t usually post on the weekends. 🙂
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lovers are losers if they write about it instead of loving 😀
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Lol Not all lovers are writers! Ah, so those who don’t write are not losers!!!
ESP, stop writing as soon as you find Z!!!
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those who dont write, sing, badly! and not in the shower. I will stop writing as soon as I fall in love, as some people I know have done, with the daily prompts 🙂
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Singing badly would be worse, I think!
Some people have stopped writing after falling in love with daily prompts and you plan to fall in love with daily prompts???
Sorry, I seem to be suffering from Tuesday slowdown! 😅
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Tuesday slowdown sounds ominous ..I never thought anything would slow down our hyperactive poet
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Gosh! ‘Hyperactive poet’ sounds bad prognosis. Am I supposed to stand in the corner, giving rest to my pen? 😥
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Haha Tuesday nerves..but you forget that the pen is mightier than the poet, it will break through
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The urge to write can be addictive, nerves or no nerves!
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Spoken as diagnosed 😂
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My affliction is no secret! 😀😀
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I felt your pain all the way through this Punam. A wonderful write 🙂💕
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Thanks a lot, dear! 🙂❤️
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This is a feeling I know all too well. It’s truly like being in an emotional prison and hoping to be freed one day. Really love this poem, Punam. 🙂💕
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Love is painful in it’s every and any form
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Indeed, it can be. 💔
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