My door drooped with depressing delusions
contemplating a complete close down
the flimsy curtains vainly tried to shoulder the pain
only their innate exuberance kept them feebly fluttering in the breeze
soft whispers lay entrapped in the dilapidated walls
never sleeping yet unable to force the issue
keeping my eyelids pinned open, staring vacantly
congeries of emotions lay congealed on the cold marble floor
I bit into a slice of pain drying on the windowsill
the back of my throat, drier than a desert, ached endlessly
the sheets on the bed crumpled like cracked glass
leaving longitudinal lacerations on my naked body
lightning failed to illuminate the penumbra of my fragmented heart
So I sit under the shroud of stars every night
as the wolf moon joins me in singing dirges till the morning
the sallow sun saunters into my courtyard
dropping a bowl of pity in my lap
the voiceless scream that had been tapping in my chest
sinks to my stomach tiredly
my muddled mind is a morass of emptiness
unable to take a categorical stand
I cradle the un-grieved losses in my arms
the futility of living never more unbridled than now.
So utterly gothic, solemn, and filled with evocative grief with haunting imagery to encompass it. This is fascinating, Punam, from the alliteration to figurative imagery like in these lines:
“the back of my throat, drier than a desert, ached endlessly
the sheets on the bed crumpled like cracked glass
leaving longitudinal lacerations on my naked body
lightning failed to illuminate the penumbra of my fragmented heart
So I sit under the shroud of stars every night
as the wolf moon joins me in singing dirges till the morning”
This is so tragic, so devastating. You wrote this beautifully, it’s moving.
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Lucy, coming from you it means so much! I can’t thank you enough for your generous appreciation! Thank you. ❤️❤️
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Loved hope you’ve symbolized your emotions. Beautiful expression
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Thanks a lot, Sadje.
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You’re always welcome
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A perfect amalgamation of dark, sadness and pain. You created a really strong and tragic image with this well done!
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Mason, thanks a lot! I am glad you think so.
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You’re welcome.
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Very evocative, very poignant. Loved it, Puman.
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Thanks so much, Bo. So glad you loved it.
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Complex and very clever – I loved this 👍🖤
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Aww! Thanks a ton! 💙💙
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You’re so welcome.
Compliments sincerely meant my friend 👍🖤
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I know that and treasure it immensely. 🙏🏼💙
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🖤🖤🖤
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So evocative, Punam! Love these lines –
the sallow sun saunters into my courtyard
dropping a bowl of pity in my lap
The dark side of our minds brilliantly expressed! Thank you so much for joining in.
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Eugi, thanks so much and my pleasure to join in.
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My pleasure!
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The tragedy well written Punam. I agree with the others on their favourite lines but have to add mine – “congeries of emotions lay congealed on the cold marble floor”
Thanks for joining in 🙂
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Thanks a lot, Brian and thank you for letting me know your favourite lines. I think almost the entire poem has been covered…what more could I ask! ☺️
My pleasure always.
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Quite spooky almost like a horror movie. Well written of course.
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I hope not too spooky! Lol
Thanks a lot.
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Not too spooky.
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👍🏼🙏🏼
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ah that bowl of pity we wallow in … my fav style sis, you nailed tragic!
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Thanks so much, sis! I swear it is so easy to wallow in it…
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too easy but I am blessed with beautiful sunshine and perfect weather yet again … no time to wallow 🙂
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That’s wonderful. 🙂
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Great combination of words. Loved it❤️😊
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Thanks so much! ❤️☺️
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“the voiceless scream that had been tapping in my chest
sinks to my stomach tiredly
my muddled mind is a morass of emptiness
unable to take a categorical stand
I cradle the un-grieved losses in my arms
the futility of living never more unbridled than now.”
This part reminds me of how I felt when I lost my dad right after high school. My first year or 2 of college was laden with so much sadness and anger. As always my dear, your words touched my heart! 😘❤️🥰🤗
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I think pain and sadness affects most of us in a similar manner, only our reactions are different. Thanks for sharing, Jenna…I can understand how difficult a time that must have been. But thankfully life moves onwards and we learn to cope with our losses.
Hugs, dear Jenna. 🤗🤗❤️❤️😘
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Very true indeed Punam my dear! ❤️ Hugs 🤗🥰🤗❤️🌹
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Thanks re. 🤗🤗
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Couldn’t stop myself from re-blogging it Punam.. You are just amazing.. 🤗💕
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Aww Debika! That is so sweet of you! Thanks so much…I am touched. 🙏🏼🤗🥰💕❤️😘
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❤🤗💕
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” the voiceless scream that had been tapping in my chest sinks to my stomach tiredly”- my favourite line.
Beautiful poem. Set in the ambience of a room, the theme of the’ ungrieved losses’ are expressed well. Apt similes, metaphors, alliterations and verbal images have enriched the feelings. The words succumbed to you like clay in potter’s hand . The connect with the readers is easy. Very evocative.
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Thank you so much for your visit and follow. Thank you kindly for your beautiful comment. Much appreciated. 🙏🏼
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The alliteration coupled with the descriptions have left me breathless!
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Thanks so much, Val. Means a lot coming from you.
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Strong, dark, sad and melancholic imagery at its best Punam. This is brilliant work !!
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Radhika, thank you so much. 🙏🏼
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My 2 Faves: “I bit into a slice of pain drying on the windowsill “; “the futility of living never more unbridled than now”. Fiercely powerful writing as usual, Punam–I feel these 2 lines hard and deep right now.
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I can understand why you like those. ❤️
Thanks so much, my dear. 💕
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Imaginative, eerie and strong words so well composed, Punam. A great poem. Loved it.
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Thanks so much, Kamal, for your appreciation. 🙏🏼❤️😊
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You are always welcome dear Punam ❤️😊😊♥️
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WOW. Love this one, Punam. So much emotion, pain, and, yet, I sense a glimmer of hope in the realization of a life lived without a yoke. Is a beautiful poem.
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Thanks so much, Jeff. Truly appreciate your wonderful words. 🙏🏼
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You’re welcome, Punam. All my pleasure, my friend. 🙏😊
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Oh, dear Punam that for me was kinda gothic and dark but absolutely beautiful..
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Thanks a lot, Mich. Appreciate your words.
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You have painted the picture of grief so well.
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Thanks a lot, Heather!
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You’re welcome!
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Superb poem, and thank you for posting it.
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Thank you kindly for your comment and follow.
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Loved your perspective! Really enticing at each sentence! Check out my stuff if you’re interested in feedback 🙂
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Thanks so much, Emily. I sure will, soon enough. 🙂
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WOW! What a beauty of a poem Punam! Every line seems to spring out from the computer and crave for attention in hope that the reader can dull its pain.
Beautiful! Loved it! 🙂
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Goutam, thanks so much for your beautiful words! I am so happy you liked it. 🙏🏼😊
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Always a pleasure to read your poems Punam. 🙂
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Felt the same. The emotions, feelings after the person leaves. ‘muddled mind is a morass of emptiness unable to take a categorical stand’ oh the confusions. Loved reading it.
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I am sorry that it resonated but at the same time thanks so much for sharing. ❤️
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(Heart)
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❤️🤗
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