We met in the dark of the night, didn’t we
I knew for sure, for you, no one was I
Me with my rent heart, invisible me
Why I never was of note, tell me why!
Shadow boxing, through the darkened shadows
Black eyes we gave ourselves, blackest of black
Throw punches we did, at each other throw
Dark souls devouring each other in dark!
Light I felt when saw an inkling of light
Purged of all despair, uncertainty purged
Fight the black veil, O my beloved, fight!
Emerge from the obsidian depths emerge!
No more residing in penumbra, you know
Blow gently sweet wind of love gently blow!
Written for dVerse MTB. Today’s host, Laura, says:
Your challenge is simply(!):
write a sonnet poem of 14 lines and 10 syllables (iambic pentameter is optional extra)
choose the Italian, English or French rhyme form
start and end each line with the same word (including derivatives and homophones)
put ‘shadow’ or its derivative in your title
use the notion of shadow as metaphor or reality somewhere in your poem.
I have written an English sonnet in pentameter. ( Writing again in iambic pentameter would have driven me crazy;) )
kudos sis, most impressive!
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So appreciate it, sis.
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A stunning piece it is, my friend. I like the prompt too. 👏🌟🌼
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Thank you so much, Lamittan. Yes, an impressive prompt. 🌷😊
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Indeed! You’re most welcome 🤗
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From the shadowy silhouette we emerge
The night is not always dark
When we converge
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Indeed, Ivor!
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Wow super and beautiful poem Punam 🙏🏼🙏🏼🙏🏼
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Thanks a lot, Kamal. 🙏🏼😊
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You are always welcome Punam 💖💖
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what a perfectly beautiful shadow sonnet of the lovers’ struggle – bravo- very well written and executed. Loved this line
“Me with my rent heart, invisible me”
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Thanks so much, Laura. Though the rhyming took some time, I really enjoyed writing for the challenge. I am glad you like that line.
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I think this is an interesting and challenging prompt. Another superb write!
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I agree, Heather, very interesting and even more challenging. Thanks so much.
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Those first lines, they get heavier and heavier…one wants to cry out to the poet…”we are here, we will lift you!”…but even though it gets more tense, darker…we at last see the soft, loving glimmer of light, thank goodness…yes, I agree with Laura, that line was galling..you did that without falling into “cheap” sentimentality, and within strict guidelines —so very well done…am I surprised? No…
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That is so reassuring, Ain. I really don’t know why my poems sometimes turn so dark. But if it can evoke the protective response, I feel gratified.
If I have stopped surprising you it doesn’t bode well for my writing. Lol! Just kidding! I am very humbled by your words always. Thank you.
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That was cheeky now I’m worried! Always surprised then! But definitely always expecting quality…the pressure’s on!
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I always work best under pressure…
Did I ever tell you how happy I am to have met you through dVerse. Just for the record…
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You know, I believe you, very much..I’m sure you do work best under pressure..and..if I was a gambler, playing poker, I would look at those words on the record that you put on the table, and double them, raising the odds..its true I play poker badly, but that’s because I play with friends and want them to win. – I always say my friends are the very best of people…so thank you, my friend, for those fantastic words..
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Friends are the best…I agree wholeheartedly. I am honoured to be considered a friend by you, Ain. Thank you.
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Wow Punam! This is magnificent. It definitely has a feel of a bittersweet romantic song. Loved it❤
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Thanks a lot, Ishita. ❤️
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Superb! 🙂
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Thank you! 🙂
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Ah, such a glorious write Punam
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Thanks so much, Paul.
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Bravo! This was a difficult assignment, wonderfully done.
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It sure was! 😅 Thanks so much, Sadje.
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You’re always welcome my dear sister
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Stunning.. Skillful.. 👏🏼👏🏼🤗💕
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Thanks so much re…❤️😊🙏🏼
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The last part is moving as the couple moves from darkness into the light, well written! 👏👏
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Thanks a lot, Tricia! Couldn’t have let them wallow in darkness for too long. 🙂❤️
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💓
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It is dark but it’s also full of energy. It was a difficult challenge and you’ve risen to it.
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Thanks so much, Jane. I am delighted by your appreciation. 🙂
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🙂
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Punam, you excelled with your effort. I not only hear the narrative I feel it. I think there needs to be a Shadow Sonnet Club like a Mile High Club.
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Thanks a lot, Li, for your lovely compliment. ❤️
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You’re very welcome, Punam ❤
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The prompt weaves itself excellently into this compelling and beautiful read! I love your use of the word silhouette in your title too. 🙂
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So glad you liked both the title and the poem.
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The title, the picture and how your poetry progresses is all so perfect. It felt deep, intense to begin with and a beautiful progression into gentleness and lightness.
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Thanks a lot, Pragalbha, for summarising it so beautifully.
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Lovely…
How love has been eulogized, bastardized, and vandalized
……
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Yet, love remains love. Thanks, dear.
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This is beautifully written Punam. I read it a few times and found myself at one with the rhythm of the write.
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Thanks so much, Dawn. So appreciate it.
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Gorgeous, Punam. I love the possibility you create with “the wind of love”! How awesome. ❤️
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Thanks so much, Jeff, I am glad you liked it. ❤️
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If I didn’t know it was a shadow sonnet I’d not have caught on – it was so seamlessly constructed!!
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Val, that is such a wonderful thing to say! Thanks.
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A dark theme beautifully written, Punam!
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Thanks a lot, Ingrid. ❤️
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I love how you managed the struggle, both with the poem, and the movement from darkness to light.
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Thanks, Björn.
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Nailed it dear!!..keep going ❤️❤️
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Thanks so much! ❤️
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I agree
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Thank you.
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this is beautiful ❤
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Thank you so much! ❤️
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Awesome poem. In this poem you had to deal with a lot of things. Well done, Poonam.🙂❤️
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Thanks a lot, Jane. ❤️
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Welcome, dear Poonam! 😊
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Love will always remain love and you have composed a fantastic poem, Punam.
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Thanks so very much, Kamal. 🙏🏼
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Always welcome Punam 💖
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