
Imprisoned in an unsightly grey high rise,
marring the already mauled skyscape
all around are brooding concrete fortresses
seemingly sinking, barely able
to bear their own unbearable weight.
the sun skulks behind
the grey, almost opaque veil
the moon wrings her hands
and sighs ineffectually
far away from the seas that
could have helped in ablutions
the pristine snow clad peaks
only glimmer prettily in pictures
not a whiff of breeze, not a leaf dances.
malodorous thoughts tighten their lasso
I wheeze, coughing abruptly
darkness in heart, dampness on cheeks
mired in melancholy’s mawkishness
I am startled by my friend,
the raucous one-eyed crow,
creating a symphony in the balcony.
as I step out to say hello to him
my eyes fall on the tiny
yellow bloom in the corner
not just promising a succulent tomato
but holding out a promise of tenacity and growth
gently prying apart the clouds of despondency
the smog triggers another bout of coughing
as I go back inside to the pervading
greyness sans the miasma
moroseness follows. Today, I will prevail.
Written for dVerse. Today’s guest host Dora says: in the middle of all the holiday activity, whatever it may be, imagine a moment of pausing, a still point of epiphany. Perhaps in that moment, you imagine the upshot of all that shopping and experience a revelation. Or on that DMZ line of the soul’s religious yearning, an unexpected moment of truth. You can write using any poetic form, whatever suits.
What would having an epiphany during this holiday season look like for you (or someone you know or imagine)?
This is such a wonderfully written poem Punam. You too the reader along all that you very experiencing. Bravo.
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That means a lot, Sadje. Thanks so much.
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Always my pleasure dear friend
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Hooray for the hope that nature brings us.
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Absolutely, VJ! What would we do otherwise! Thank you.
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Welcome
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So relatable to the city dweller. The bloom sure teaches us lessons of tenacity. “Today I will prevail”…loved that ending filled with a positive reinforcement. Beautifully written Punam!
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Yes, most cities are the same. It is amazing what nature can teach us. Thanks so much, Radhika.
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Well done Punam! Tenacity – a quality of nature that allows plants to find purchase in the cracks of cement or the one-eyed crow to thrive amid the concrete jungle. That we imitate nature is good – that we hope even better!
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Indeed, Val. So much to imbibe from nature. That one-eyed crow is a frequent visitor. Always appreciate your insights.
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This is so wonderful! Beautiful descriptions. 💚
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Jennifer, thank you so much. 💙
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Punam,
Truly, you write like an angel, my dear. “I am startled by my friend,/the raucous one-eyed crow”: a voice calling to promise, hope, tenacity, growth embodied in a “tiny yellow flower.” The last line is bold and effective, your spirit coming through like lightning on a cloudy day. The imagery is intense and gripping to good effect, especially in the first half, laying the groundwork to what comes. I especially liked: “concrete fortresses” “barely able/to bear their own unbearable weight,” “not a whiff of breeze, not a leaf dances/malodorous thoughts tighten their lasso,” and “gently prying apart the clouds of despondency.” Beautifully done, my friend. You prevail.
pax,
dora
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Dora, I can’t tell you how heartening your words are! My surroundings are not beautiful enough to inspire but I can only write about what I see. Thank you, thank you so much! In the short time that I have known you, I have come to admire your writing, so this means a lot. ❤️
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God bless you, Punam. You create a palace with your words whatever your surroundings. Thank you for your kind words. ❤️💜🧡
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🙏🏼❤️
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A lovely pause … and the epiphany that follows.
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Thanks a lot, Helen. Always appreciate your visits.
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Powerful stuff…and yet, like the little yellow bloom, you will stand firm….v nicely done..
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Thanks so much. Glad you like it.
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Wow – Punam – your imagery is out of this world. I feel like I could be standing there beside you.
❤
David
P.S. I'm cheering for the tomato!
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David, it means a lot to me that you feel you could be standing beside me. Thank you. ❤️
P.S. Will keep you posted. 🍅
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‘mired in melancholy’s mawkishness’ – I love the alliteration here: it really lifts us out of the miasma like nature’s gifts 🌱
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So glad you enjoyed the alliteration, Ingrid. Nature’s gifts keep us going. ❤️
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I love how you found that repose, the bloom that makes you go on, though I hope you may find a place with less miasma… lovely as usual
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Björn, thank you.
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can’t imagine how tough it is in a grey tower with all that unhealthy smog … nature is always a bearer of life and hope whatever form it takes! Glad you have a crow and tomato plant but might be best to stay indoors until the smog clears … powerful writing, vivid imagery, you took us right there sis 🙂
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At this time of the year north India, especially Delhi is bad. Same story every year. We are in a sort of lockdown again. If my writing could take you there, my job is done. Thanks a lot, sis. 🙂
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you did indeed, glad you are survivors … take care!
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A poem that helps us to see there is hope everywhere, even in the greyness of life. This was a lovely write.
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Thanks a lot, Heather. All we have to do is be open to the idea of hope.
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You’re welcome.
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Plants and nature: great teachers. 👏
And you: wow. A lovely word hoarder/refiner/stringer and I am one of your greatest fans. ♥️
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Aww, Selma! That is so sweet of you! You humble me with your appreciation. ❤️🙏🏼
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Love it….tenacity!
Today I will prevail!….and tomorrow and every day till I can
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Absolutely! ❤️
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Fantastic poem, Punam. Reminds me of seeing tiny shoots rising from the concrete. Resonates of resilience. Wonderful, my dear friend. ❤️
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You write so beautiful and reflective. I love this, Poonam. 💜❤🌿
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Okay, found it! Thanks a lot, Shreya. ❤️
And no worries about the spelling. 😊
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Hehe finally. You’re welcome. ❤
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Apologies – Punam!
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Apologies for what, Shreya?
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Ah i was not sure if I spelt you correct earlier 🤦♀️
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Okay. 😀
I think your comment landed in spam. Let me fish it out.
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Nice one!Why am I feeling that I wrote the wrong kind of epiphany for this DVerse prompt?
Is this related to the prompt,or does it stand out? 🙂
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Thanks. I will read it as soon as I can. There is no right or wrong. It is after all our interpretation of the prompt. 😊
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That is a masterpiece!! Beautifully expressed❤
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Thanks, dear. ❤️
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I love the line – the moon wrings her hands! Powerful words that express the importance of tenacity and to have hope.
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Beautiful imagery! You had me pausing with you to notice the bloom, what an inspiring end!
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That I could do that is heartening. Thanks a lot. 💞
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This is beautiful 😍
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Thank you! 💙
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Well written…nice😊🙏
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Thanks a lot! 🙏🏼😊
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Just loved the finishing style.. ‘I will prevail’.. Beautiful.. Hopeful.. 🤗💕
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