Stop!
stop the din in my head
stop the clamouring
the constant hammering
can’t you come one by one
why do so many of you come all at once
you hound me in my sleep too
I often wake up with a start
sweating and clammy
stop please
specially the dark ones
depressing me beyond words
you cloud my clarity
and blanket all light
pushing me in a limbo
give me some peace
a few moments of blankness
where I could immerse in nothingness
just nothing
and come out clean
remove your tentacles
suffocating me no end
they choke all the happy ones
driving them far away
from where they never return
I am left shivering
even at high noon
my spine turning into an icicle
ready to snap anytime
Go away
Please go away
let me cleanse my body and soul
in the heat of the moonlight
and air all crevices and nooks
remove all cobwebs
maybe happy thoughts will then
decide to reside.
Today’s challenge is to write a poem that starts with a command. It could be as uncomplicated as “Look,” as plaintive as “Come back,” or as silly as “Don’t you even think about putting that hot sauce in your hair.” Whatever command you choose, I hope you have fun ordering your readers around.
Wonderful, Punam 💕🙂
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Thanks a lot, Harmony. ❤️
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Beautiful!
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Thanks a lot, Garima!
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So right for the negatives fog the mind and stopping them is not an easy task. Yet, we fight. I loved the creation.
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Kritika, thanks a lot, dear.
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🙏🙏
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🙏🏼🙏🏼
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Wonderful poem so well composed, Punam.
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Kamal, thanks a lot!
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Welcome dear Punam 🙏🏼
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The tension builds and builds, and you never let it go, so that by the end the reader is immersed in this world.
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That’s a lovely compliment! Thank you!
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Might call for medication and/or exorcism?
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Ha! Maybe meditation.
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Oh yes, we all need a break from that storm of thoughts from time to time – or maybe all the time!
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I agree, Ingrid, for some time at the least!
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Your words describe the feeling well.
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Thanks, Heather. Was going through it while writing.
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Sorry that you were. I had one of those nights last night. Hoping tonight will be different.
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I do hope you had a better night, Heather. Life can suck sometimes.
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I did. These things always seem cyclical.
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Good. So they are.
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I really liked the idea of clearing those cobwebs..
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Thanks, Namratha.
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This is such a powerful poem Punam. Excellent take on the prompt.
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Thanks so much, Sadje.
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You’re most welcome
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Oh yes, we do need to command the obtrusive thoughts to give way. We need to clear up. The stifling came through very well.
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So we do, Sonia! Thank you.
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Whooh, gave me the creeps over some haunting demon. A magical one. Well written 👏
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I hope you got rid of it! Thanks, Lamittan.
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Haha. It’s just an illusion. Ain’t haunted at all. Thanks anyway, dear.
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It felt like you were writing my thoughts/feelings 🙂
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Z…hugs.
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ha you describe that mischievous monkey mind so well, we all know it!
The beauty of meditation allows one to stop it at will … after years of intense practice 😉 but it is definitely possible and blissful 🙂
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Lol I knew you would say this, sis! But you are absolutely correct. Meditation surely helps.
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if more would only make the space to try it sis … mental/emotional first aid is essential!
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You’ve really recreated the feeling of those dark thoughts. I hope the go away soon! (K)
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Kerfe, they go away only to reappear at some other time.
Thanks.
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It’s a hard battle to win.
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Punam this one is superlative!
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Thanks a lot, Val.
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Go away spooky ghost, go away!
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Your spell worked, Bo!!
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Great.
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Reblogged this on The Reluctant Poet.
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Thanks, Chuck.
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A wonderfully expressed poem on mind, Punam. I could feel the stress of those dark thoughts viscerally, as I could also feel the cleanse of the silence you describe. Both powerful. ❤️
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Jeff, that is so lovely of you to say! Thank you so much, my friend. ❤️
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Just stop. Tremendous. Adore this. 👏
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Selma, thank you!
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Perfectly used prompt. Very relatable for when they come unrelentingly.
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Thanks so much, Pragalbha. They do that sometimes.
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