Asphalt flowers of love

Pic courtesy Pixels

We walked miles with blistered feet across the burlywood desert of opposition
and lay bare entwined under the
puce blanket of the firmament

we tasted the amaranth velvetiness of sunrise
and the frisson of passion tingled our spines against the moss covered slate walls

lazy cerulean days lounged and laughed with gay abandon
liquid sunshine afternoons basked and lingered in coffee cups

dusk dripped delicious dramatic hues
as we exchanged eternal love soaked vows to never part

of all the rainbow dyed love stories whispered in my ears
not one mentioned the fading tints of aftermath of love

wishes now wither within my bosom before they can bloom
sunsets are wishy washy and nights; insufferable monotones of black.

I have reworked an old poem for dVerse OLN. Sanaa, our host has shared a lovely poem “Sidewalk” by Shel Silverstein. The title of my poem is inspired by the line “Past the pits where the asphalt flowers grow”.

24 thoughts on “Asphalt flowers of love

  1. “wishes now wither within my bosom before they can bloom
    sunsets are wishy washy and nights; insufferable monotones of black.” 👌🏼

    I love how the last couplet seems to deepen the poem and anchor it in some real truth. But how the “blistered feet” in the first line already hinted at it. Beautiful, Punam 💕

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  2. Punam, I like how you used the kernel of asphalt flowers to germinate your lush, colorful, and poignant poem. Losing a beloved does wash the color out of the world 😦

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  3. Other people’s poems are often where we find titles for our own, and you certainly found a gem in the Shel Silverstein line, Punam, which your poem deserves, with its appeal to all the senses. And I learned a new colour and gorgeous word: burlywood! I love the ‘amaranth velvetiness of sunrise’ and alliterative ‘dusk dripped delicious dramatic hues’. These lines stood out for me:

    ‘of all the rainbow dyed love stories whispered in my ears
    not one mentioned the fading tints of aftermath of love’.

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  4. Very nicely done, Punam. I love your lines of the sun dripping hues of love…

    …of all the rainbow dyed love stories whispered in my ears
    not one mentioned the fading tints of aftermath of love

    Interesting how the honeymoon fades in time.

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  5. Rainbows tend to fade quickly and the tint that remains is usually a different story. Wonderful poem and some intriguing words on display.

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  6. Lots of beautiful descriptive imagery, especially “amaranth velvetiness of sunrise”,

    and “tingled our spines against the moss covered slate walls”

    ❤️

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