
Despair dropped like dead weight on her shoulders
the pain of desertion writ on her drooping lips
her stricken heart too smote to smoulder
her vacant eyes on a distant horizon affixed
the pain of desertion writ on her drooping lips
soft whispers lay entrapped in her dilapidated heart
her vacant eyes on a distant horizon affixed
never sleeping or blinking, continuing to smart
soft whispers lay entrapped in her dilapidated heart
voiceless screams tapping vociferously in her chest
never sleeping or blinking, continuing to smart
her eyes; nothing but twin pools of morass of emptiness
voiceless screams tapping vociferously in her chest
her stricken heart too smote to smoulder
her eyes; nothing but twin pools of morass of emptiness
despair dropped like dead weight on her shoulders.
A Pantoum on the theme of abandonment for David’s W3 where yours truly is the POW.
This is such a evocative poem Punam. Bravo.
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Thank you so much, Sadje! ❤️
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You’re most welcome
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So moving, Punam! 💕🙂
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Thanks a lot, Harmony. 🙂❤️
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so beautifully expressed, Punam.
touching 🤍
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Thanks so much, dear. ❤️
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most welcome 🤍
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I’ve always enjoyed the Pantoum!
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Great! Look forward to yours.
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Yes “we see in a mirror darkly”
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Darkly the reflection stares back.
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“Darkly” is a judgement word, from my perspective
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Not from mine.
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And that is the beauty of our uniqueness!
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Absolutely. 😊
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Profound and deep poem, Punam the pic too was perfect.
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Thanks a lot, Kamal. Much appreciated.
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Most welcome dear Punam ❤️
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You’re a pantoum grandmaster, Punam. I remember reading another by you that was just as excellent as this one.
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Tanmay, that’s high praise! Thank you so much. Truly appreciated.
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Congratulations on being POW and a lovely pantoum you make it look so easy 😊
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Thanks a lot, Angela. It is not very difficult once you have the opening stanza written. 🙂
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The despair, the pain, the voiceless screams – it is all felt within so movingly as I read your poem, beautifully done.
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Pragalbha, that’s exactly what I was aiming for. Thanks for reading so beautifully.
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I am glad to know I read it as intended 🙂
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Such beautiful rhythm for such harsh emotion. You do this form so well. (K)
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Thanks a lot, Kerfe. I will cherish this compliment.
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What a skilful pen you have..!! 🤗💕👍🏼😊👌🏼👌🏼…
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Thanks so much. 🥰❤️🙏🏼
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Sadness and harsh emotions beautifully expressed, Punam. 💖
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Thanks a lot, Eugi. ❤️
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Powerful and emotional!
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Thanks a lot, Sarah.
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Tops… xoxo
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🥰🥰
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This is so intense, Punam… I’m particularly struck by her drooling lips… Wow….
~David
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Much appreciated, David. ❤️
Btw, it is “dropping”.😃
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oops! that’s so weird – I read “drooling” and even reread it to make sure because I was so struck by that word… My eyes misread it!
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Let me check…maybe I ended up typing ‘drooling’ instead of ‘drooping’! 😅
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It is ‘drooping’. 😃
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I must have been really tired!
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No worries. 🤗🤗
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A brilliant and well written pantoum Punam. I was struggling with mine when i wrote it 🤭 but you just made it looked so easy.
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Thanks so much, Mich for your kind words. I am sure yours will be beautiful. ❤️
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Powerful, and deep. Excellent write, dear Punam. ❤️
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Thanks a lot, Jeff. Much appreciated. ❤️
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So this is how it’s done! ❤️
Thank you for your pantoum prompt and teaching me so much 🙏🌹
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Lesley, thanks so much! Once the first stanza is in place, the rest is not so tough. We are all learning so much from each other everyday. My pleasure. 🙏🏼❤️🌷
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💗
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We all know these well Punam. Well done my friend! 💞
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Thanks so much, Cindy. ❤️
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Always Punam! ❣️
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