
A closer dark encircles me
I find it harder to shake it off
the achromatic pewter dusk-dawn-sky
deepens to a coal blackness
regrets-strewn night descends icily
I singe my fingers as I reach out to the moon
all I wanted was a sip of cold winter
to damp down despair with numbing coldness
as the night begins to wear down
touched by the gentle golden fingers of the sun
the hedgerows birds suddenly begin to sing
I sit shivering and stuporous, with my sullen loneliness
Light alights on my sagging shoulders
lightening the burden of fears I carry
making light of the quilt of pain around me
and I shed my weariness.
Written for dVerse poetics. Today’s host, Sarah, has asked us to write about light.
So, so lovely, Punam! The repetition of “light” in the last stanza, in its varying connotations, works beautifully, after the heaviness of the earlier. Well done.
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Thanks a lot, Dora. I am glad that the repetition worked. Much appreciated. ❤️
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A song for your wonderful poem Punam …
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Ivor, thank you so much and also for the lovely song. 💙🤗
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You’re welcome Panum 🤗🌏🎼
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Such an evocative poem Punam. Love the ending lines.
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Thanks a lot, Sadje. ❤️
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You’re always welcome my dear sister
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I singe my fingers as I reach out to the moon
all I wanted was a sip of cold winter
I particularly liked that! I also like the way light falls and lifts the poet, the contrast is lovely.
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Sarah, much appreciated. Wonderful prompt, indeed.
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You have masterfully brought light to the ‘coal blackness’, Punam, and I love the imagery in the lines:
‘I singe my fingers as I reach out to the moon
all I wanted was a sip of cold winter’
and
the wakening of nature by the ‘gentle golden fingers of the sun’.
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Kim, so glad you enjoyed these lines. Thank you. Much appreciated.
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Beautiful! I especially adore; “touched by the gentle golden fingers of the sun/the hedgerows birds suddenly begin to sing.” ❤❤❤
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Sanaa, thanks so much, dear. ❤️❤️
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Love the last stanza…
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Reena, thanks a lot. ❤️
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You have written some wonderful imagery. I love “achromatic pewter dusk-dawn-sky
deepens to a coal blackness” just to mention one.
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Heather, I am so glad you enjoyed it. Thank you. ❤️
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My pleasure.
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Wonderfully penned with so much heart and beauty Punam! ❣️
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Cindy, thanks a lot, my friend. ❣️
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you’re so welcome always! ❣️
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All those lights in the final stanza, but especially this line:
‘I singe my fingers as I reach out to the moon’
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Jane, thank you. Xoxo
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xxx
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The hopefulness in your last stanza buoyed my spirits …. this is a beautifully penned poem.
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Helen, thank you so much.
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Punam this is marvelous!
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Thanks, Val.
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I love the way you let nature’s varying light be a wonderful backdrop to blend with your mood… who governs whom?
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That’s a good question.
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Punam, this poem is a beautiful journey to the light. It is enough to make me a morning person!
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Cheryl, so glad it inspires you to become a morning person! Thanks for your lovely words. ❤️
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Beautiful Punam. I love how you seamlessly wove nature into the ups and downs of human emotions. The last stanza came through as a perfect antidote to the atmosphere set in the beginning.
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Sonia, thanks a lot. Much appreciated.
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‘quilt of pain’ – perfect expression of emotions.
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Thanks, Sara.
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Light alights on my sagging shoulders
lightening the burden of fears I carry
making light of the quilt of pain around me
and I shed my weariness.
How easily you do these prompts Punam.. I love to stay amazed.. 🤗🤗
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