Cycle of life

~ paeansunplugged
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1.
At the promise of spring
the schooner is finally set to sail
’tis better not to kvetch

2.
Soul sisters share stories at night
doing mother’s will
Winning battles our way

3.
With me, you better tread with caution
as passion often incites treason
bubbling and frothing to putrid death

4.
I do have a yen for the luxury of anonymity
with appreciation, this heart does beam
keeping me warm and safe

5.
As life transits towards the end
it makes my staid life a mural of flavours
and in my dreams the lullaby carries me home.

The first four stanzas were put together for the MTB at dVerse last week. Both Jane and Merril mentioned that it would be a cadralor if I added one more stanza. So I went back to my poems and picked three more end lines. Is it a cadralor now, do tell!

Sharing at dVerse OLN.

52 thoughts on “Cycle of life”

  2. Yes, I’d call this a cadralor. One of the rules is that it has to end with something positive, what you ‘yearn for’. Not a love poem, but optimistic. This fits the bill. Then you have to hone each stanza so it works as a poem in its own right with something in it that grabs the attention. You can work on these things for hours!

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    1. Thanks a lot, Jane. I agree a cadralor needs a lot of honing and still one feels it could have been better. This one did not require much work because I was using end lines.
      Thanks once again because whatever little I have understood about writing a cadralor is from reading yours. 🙂

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      1. I’m pleased to help! If you want to read some cadralore from the inventors of the form, they’re in Gleam magazine. Here’s a link to the latest issue.
        https://gleampoets.org/issue-5/
        I have a poem in this one and a couple of the previous issues. I’m still not sure how my cadralore fit as they’re not much like the other poems, but the editors think they do so…

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      2. Oh, they are tough! Yes, Merril’s poetry is also very good. To be honest I am in awe of so many poets here and am quite touched when they praise my poems.

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