
At the promise of spring
the schooner is finally set to sail
’tis better not to kvetch
Soul sisters share stories at night
doing mother’s will
Winning battles their way
With me, you better tread with caution
as passion often incites treason
bubbling and frothing to putrid death
I do have a yen for the luxury of anonymity
with appreciation, this heart does beam
keeping me warm and safe.
Written for dVerse poetics. Today’s host, Laura, has asked us to use the last lines of twelve of our recent poems to write a new poem.
I read this several times and you made it seem easier than you think – those opening lines really do set the poem afloat and the second stanza sails nicely into the third
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Laura, you are very kind. Thank you so much!
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Each stanza makes its own sense, with the 3rd stanza being my favorite.
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Thanks a lot, Li. Each stanza is like a mini poem.
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You’re welcome!
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This is so filled with energy. It feels like an upbreak with the schooner ready to sail… it gives me a sense of spring.
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Björn, I am so glad it gave you a sense of spring knowing how harsh winter can be there.
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Ooo, this is really good – and certainly is full of energy and movement as Bjorn says.
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Thanks so much, Kim. I am so pleased you think so.
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Lovely rhythm, flow and movement in this one, Punam! Bravo ❤❤❤
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Sanaa, thanks so much. 💖💖
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Most especially love that second stanza! I agree with Bjorn: lots of energy within this “found” poem!
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I am delighted you liked the second stanza, Lillian! Thank you.
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A nice cento or would that be a sento (for self generated poetry lines)?
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Hehe! Sento sounds good, Val. 😄
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I can almost remember each poem from these lines, Punam. ❤️
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Aww, Dora! That is such a lovely compliment. ❤️❤️
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A challenge well met and weaved so well Punam!~ ❤️
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Cindy, I am glad you think so! Thank you. ❤️
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I adore the last 3 lines, gives me a feeling of comfort. Soul sisters sharing stories are the best.
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Thanks so much, Grace.
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Amazing put-together, P and that next-to-last stanza is BLAMMO MINDBLOWING!!!!
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Ron, thank you so much!
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Third stanza is my favorite in a poem that flows rather unbelievably! Cheers.
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Helen, you are very kind! Thank you so much.
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Oh, this is lovely, Punam! Seamless and with such surprising turns of phrase 🙂 Love these:
“’tis better not to kvetch”
“bubbling and frothing to putrid death”
“I do have a yen for the luxury of anonymity”
❤
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Sunra, I am glad you found this seamless. Thank you! ❤️
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You’re welcome, chick ❤
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💖💖
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Well done, Punam. I like your line about caution of passion…
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Thanks so much, Dwight.
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You are welcome.
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Oh this is excellent Punam. Very evocative poem
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Thanks, Sadje. I am glad it made some sense.
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Of course it did. 👌🏼👌🏼👌🏼
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🙏🏼❤️
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💞💖
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I like the journey this took me on, the ending left me with a smile which I always appreciate! 💝
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Tricia, very kind of you! Much appreciated. ❤️
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I love your last stanza
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Thank you!
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Nice stanzas – craftily put together and the second is pure gold.
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I like how it starts off on other people and then turns personal. The last two lines make a splendid ending. And the last line of the second stanza was brilliant, I thought.
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Thanks, Tanmay. The only skill I employed in this verse was in the grouping of lines. 😄
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Your individual stanzas make startling small poems. I love that second one particularly. Your poem makes me think it would make a good cadralor if you added a fifth stanza that pulled all the others together, giving a meaning to the whole.
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Thank you, Jane. The stanzas are so different from each other that it did look like a cadralor to me. I will take up your advice and add a fifth stanza soon.
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I hope you’ll post it. I’d like to see how you bring it all together.
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Hi Jane. I have added another stanza. Do read it and let me know if I have been able to bring it together.
https://paeansunpluggedblog.wordpress.com/2022/12/09/cycle-of-life/
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Of course Jane said exactly what I thought! 🤣 Each stanza is like a poem in itself, and together it’s an almost cadralor.
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Haha! I agree there is hardly any connection between each stanza so a fifth one tying all would make it a cadralor. 😄
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😊
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I like the optimism here. the strength. (K)
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Thanks a lot, Kerfe.
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This flows nicely. Well done.
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Thank you, Ken! 😊
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Oh my goodness this is a wonderful result of your end lines. I love the way the tone of voice begins with a subtle tone, setting up the journey and then surprisingly grows in attitude….a bit cheeky.
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I like ‘cheeky’! Thank you, Mish. 🙂
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Wonderful write, Punam! That last stanza is epic. ❤️
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Glad you think so, Jeff! Much appreciated. ❤️
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This is a great prompt! You’ve executed it well.
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Thanks a lot, Heather.
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My pleasure.
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I especially love the third stanza ❤
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Thanks AJ. ❤️
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Punam yours is a delight to read, not just a great construction using the form, but the content is rightly poised – so brooding.
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Paul, much appreciated, my friend!
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Most welcome Punam 🙂
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