The gelid golden glow of dusk
hides in its bosom tears of blood
the schooner is finally set to sail
far-off lands beckon with fervour
hiding in its bosom tears of blood
untold stories of separation and love
far-off lands beckon with fervour
restless heart beats to the rhythm of the seas
untold stories of separation and love
burnished memories like a beacon of hope
restless heart beats to the rhythm of the seas
remembering the pain reflected in teary eyes
burnished memories like a beacon of hope
in the gelid golden glow of dusk
remembering the pain reflected in teary eyes
the schooner is finally set to sail.
Written for dVerse poetics. Today’s host, Merril, has invited us to write an ekphrastic poem to some very interesting paintings.
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Oh! I love pantoums. I love the sounds in your first line especially, Punam.
You mentioned that your husband was at sea for six months, so I imagine the feelings ring true.
Thank you for joining in the ekphrastic fun!
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Thanks so much, Merril! It was a wonderful prompt. Though I liked the first picture very much, writing for this one was much easier because I could write about my feelings (as you rightly imagined). 💙
My pleasure. 😊
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You’re welcome, Punam. I’m so pleased you enjoyed the prompt. 💙
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Wonderful form, wonderful poem Punam!
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Thanks a lot, Kim!
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A beautiful capture of atmosphere and colour, Punam! I especially like the rhythm and sounds in ‘restless heart beats to the rhythm of the seas’.
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Thank you so much, Kim! You always uncannily pick my favourite line. ❤️
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A very good poem, Punam, and an interesting form as well.
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Thanks so much, Dwight.
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You are welcome!
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A double delight! The pantoum is one of my favorite forms and this poem really strikes the heart!!
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Ah! Double thanks, dear Val.
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Exceptional poem hon.
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Thank you so much, sweetheart. ❤️🌷
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My pleasure hon.
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💖
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There is definitely a melancholy in the painting and the repetition expands that feeling in your words. (K)
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Thanks a lot, Kerfe. I am glad I am not the only one who felt the painting was a tad bit melancholic.
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A wonderful poem Punam to counter that 6 month’s separation which is taken as a test of love! A great form!
Hank
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Thanks so much, Hank.
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Beautiful writing Punam. “burnished memories like a beacon of hope
in the gelid golden glow of dusk” — just wonderful my friend.
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Thank you so very much, Rob.
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A beautifully written poem Punam. Very heartfelt indeed. Love it’s flow and rhythm
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Thanks a lot, Sadje. ❤️
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My pleasure
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Luv all the alliteration which adds so much interesting sound to the reading of this poem
Much💜love
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Thanks kindly, dear Gillena. 💙
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Yes, the alliteration is excellent. I wonder how this journey will go. That schooner looks like it can weather a storm. I enjoyed this poem, Punam.
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Yes, it does look like it can weather any storm. Thank you so much, Tanmay. Much appreciated.
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Your words made it strong and sturdy.
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🙏🏼😊
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The ebb and flow of the lines suit the seafaring subject well, and the rising and falling of spirits.
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Thanks a lot, Jane. xoxo
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xxx
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A real beauty, Punam! Splendid alliteration and excellent use of the form.
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Thanks a lot, Eugi. ❤️
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beautiful representation of the painting, I particularly love the line ‘restless heart beats to the rhythm of the seas’ ❤
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Thanks, AJ! That’s my favourite line too! ❤️
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I also chose the image, This poem is beautiful and gives a lost love feeling. Nice! I especially like these lines ❤
"untold stories of separation and love
burnished memories like a beacon of hope
restless heart beats to the rhythm of the seas
remembering the pain reflected in teary eyes"
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Yes, your poem is lovely. Thank you so much for liking those lines. ❤️
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A pantoum, they say? Wow, you aced it as always. How lovely your lines. Thanks for sharing. Blessings and happy new month. xoxo
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Thanks for your kinds words, Selma and your blessings. Happy new month to you too! ❤️
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How wonderful that you made it a pantoum 😊 great work Punam!
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Thanks a lot, Ingrid. 😊❤️
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wonderful take on the prompt Punam! profound imagery
💞
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Cindy, much appreciated! ❤️
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“The gelid golden glow of dusk
hides in its bosom tears of blood”
This is wonderful description, Ma’am. 🙂
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Thanks a lot, Aishwarya. 😊
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The repeating lines are very effective here, Punam.
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Thanks a lot, Li. 🙂
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You’re welcome 🙂
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