
Will my words sit timidly
on the threshold of life forever
hesitant, directionless and self-deprecating
or like restless vagabonds
traverse the unlikeliest of places
wandering on the lips of strangers unknown
What determines the life of a song
is it the number of times it is sung
or when its relevance surpasses time
to flow into eternity
morsels of soul wrapped in metaphors
do they satiate other souls
or meet disdain and curl up and wither
trampled by indifference
From these tattered, stitched up verses
would anyone try to piece my lies
or would they lie gathering dust
under a stash of showy strophes
would some wise eye espy the thread
of truth discreetly running through
or would they be dismissed as trite tedious tropes
Spring-like these words gurgle on their own
they know not what they want
except that they want to flow
my pen gives them the spotlight that they crave
though I crave not the spotlight
a mystery, an enigma I claim not to be
I do have a yen for the luxury of anonymity.
Written for David’s W3 where POW Larry has asked us to incorporate chiasmus in our poem, for Eugi’s moonwashed weekly challenge.
Sharing at dVerse OLN.
fab personification of words
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Thanks so much, Larry. Very interesting prompt.
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Wonderful, Punam!
“Spring-like these words gurgle on their own
they know not what they want
except that they want to flow” 💙
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Thank you, Merril. 💙
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You’re welcome, Punam! 💙
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I often wonder what happens my pages of misunderstood words that are strewn over the splintered stage after the tattered curtain comes down …
But then again our words have been “written” and are a piece of our “existence” … cheers my friend 🤗🌏🎼
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So they are, Ivor! Cheers, my friend!
Wonderful song! 🤗💙
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You’re a true wordsmith Punam. Love your poem, specially these lines;
though I crave not the spotlight
a mystery, an enigma I claim not to be
I do have a yen for the luxury of anonymity.
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Thanks, dear Sadje! ❤️ Always grateful for your appreciation.
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But the truth my dear friend.
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❣️
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💖
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From these tattered, stitched up verses
would anyone try to piece my lies”
Luv the questions proposed in your poem.
Much💛love
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Thanks so much, Gillena. 💙
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“What determines the life of a song
is it the number of times it is sung
or when its relevance surpasses time”
I especially like this passage in your wonderful poem Punam. This was a pleasure to read. You’d have made a great presentation of it at the open the link night live today but perhaps the time doesn’t work for your schedule. It was discussed today that there perhaps should be two different times when 0LN Live should occur, that way people from different parts of the planet could find a time that would be convenient. Anyway, love your poem here, it’s excellent.
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Rob, I would have loved to join OLN. But it’s late here then and I am not too comfortable on the camera. Nonetheless, I am touched by your kind words. Thank you so much. Much appreciated. ❤️🙂
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I absolutely love, love this! Especially this part; “What determines the life of a song
is it the number of times it is sung or when its relevance surpasses time to flow into eternity.” Stellar write! 💘💘💘
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Thanks a lot, Sanaa. Glad those lines resonated. ❤️❤️
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I love the questions you pose in your poems. Questions every poet wonders about. We all hope our words go beyond pen and paper. Your description here is perfect:
morsels of soul wrapped in metaphors
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Thanks so much, Dwight. I guess these are existential questions all writers ask.
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Yes, I agree!
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I think we all wonder these things about our creations. But we keep creating because we must. (K)
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We do and we must, Kerfe.
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Wonderful meditation on what happens in the “afterlife” of our creations, Punam.
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I like “afterlife of our creations”, Dora. Thank you.
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Beautiful writing. Let the words flow.
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Thanks, Grace. I will.
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Punam this one is excellent!!
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Val, I am delighted you think so. ❤️
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I suppose anonymity is a luxury, for those who do not crave celebrity! 😅
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Hehe! I love my anonymity. 😅
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Wonderful post
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Thanks a lot.
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Oh, my, what an amazing piece, Punam! Brava!
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Eugi, thank you so much.
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My pleasure, Punam!
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Punam, Punam, Punam! This is simply a gorgeous poem from start to finish!! ❤ I love the sentiments in every line, the way you describe the journey of words as "restless vagabonds," how songs can "flow into eternity" or be "trampled by indifference," the thread of truth running through words…I could go on. You've encapsulated some essence of divinity and you do it so gently but powerfully. Beautiful, my dear, beautiful ❤
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Sunra, every once in a while one receives a compliment so heartfelt, that writing as a vocation seems so worthwhile. I will cherish your words of appreciation all my life and every time, my writing falters, I will read this for motivation. Thanks ever so much. ❤️❤️
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You are most welcome, my dear! ❤ It's simply true 🙂
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❤️
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A masterpiece! I really loved this poem…the ponderings…the alliteration…the carefully worded phrases…I could go on…
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Heather, it is this resonance that makes writing worthwhile. Thank you so very much. ❤️🙏🏼
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You are without a doubt a true wordsmith Punam…👏👏👏
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Mich, you are very kind. Thank you. 🙏🏼
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This is so well written Punam. Your words flowed and evoked so many feelings. Loved it! 💗
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Cindy, my dear, thank you so much! ❤️❣️
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You are so welcome my friend! ❤️
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Your words are never timid, Punam. I love this poem.
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Tanmay, that’s a lovely compliment. Thank you.
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Oh, I love this write, Punam. That last stanza is my absolute fav. Amazing! ❤️
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Jeff, thanks so much! So glad you liked the last stanza. ❤️
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Your welcome, dear Punam. Always! ❤️
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Punam, sometimes the prompt rocks you, and sometimes you rock the prompt… And this is CLEARLY a case of the latter ❤
~David
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David, heartfelt thanks. ❤️
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I love the way you describe the words of a song as if they had a life of their own.
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Thanks, Björn.
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I love the idea of a song flowing into eternity 🎶 ❤️
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Thanks, Lesley. ❤️
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💕
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Punam,
The lovely Murisopsis is hosting W3 this week:
Enjoy!
~David
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How wonderful! Thanks for the heads up, David.
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*hug*
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Hi, Punam ❤
This week's W3 prompt, hosted by the lovely Aishwarya, is now live!
Enjoy!
Much love,
David
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Thanks so much, David. I doubt if I will be able to respond but I will try my best. ❤️
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Of course – I’m just sharing the love ❤
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❤️❤️ Thanks always for that.
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