Thoughtlings

Murmuration by Lee Madgwick

Lying supine
a tiny, niggling, not-so-good thought
waits for darkness to descend
then like a magnet
attracts many more
coming in droves
all flocking my mind


soft murmurs turning cacophonous
tumbling, jumbling, shrieking
moving at lightning speed
traversing my mindscape
finding gaps, filling niches,
overwhelming my being
making my head throb

then finally tired of chasing themselves
they depart
leaving behind an empty shell
denuded, deprived, distressed.

Written for dVerse poetics. Today’s host, Sarah, has asked us to write an ekphrastic based on Lee Madgwick’s artwork shared.

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77 thoughts on “Thoughtlings

  1. Oh Punam this hurts! And is beautiful… I can only hope that it is an imagined thought-storm, and the distressed deprived state blows over as the murmurers coil down into the marshes and subside into roosting conviviality.

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  2. Oh Punam this hurts! And is beautiful… I can only hope that it is an imagined thought-storm, and the distressed deprived state blows over as the murmurers coil down into the marshes and subside into roosting conviviality.

    I am so glad you chose this one – I was tempted… and you have put so much into it.

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  3. I have heard the buzzing in my brain Punam. Like a prelude to madness. But it has, to this point, spared me my lucidity. May it always do the same for you. Really liked this my friend, and it reflected the painting extremely well. 👍🏼🙂✌🏼❤️

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  4. The darkness is only one side of the “coin of life.” Light is imprinted upon the other side of the coin. My friend’s adage is that “the light is always at least 51%.” I think that the trials of life can lead beyond the dispirited shell that results from negative thoughts; and, beyond the darkness is light, if receptive be the heart to the positivity. Even so, this requires an active participation on behalf of a person to perceive the light, and make an effort to meet the challenges of life. In part, this response is prompted by my own discomfort with the poem ending upon a dark note.

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    1. I am sorry, Tzvi, if my poem caused you discomfort. If you have been reading my poems, you might have noticed, I usually end my poems on a note of hope. This image did not offer any ray of hope to me thus the gloomy ending. Rest assured, I always see light at the end of the tunnel even if the tunnel seems endless.
      Thanks for your valuable feedback. I truly appreciate it.

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  5. What a well made connection between the pic and a state of anxiety. I haven’t had the misfortune of directly experiencing such a thing, but you gave me some insight. IN am sure it is a very scary and depleting experience.

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  6. Such a wonderful, though disturbing, response to the disturbing, but wonderful image. So much motion in the painting and in your words–but so troubling, those dark, frantic thoughts.

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