
Finally the darkness descended
but was pallid from tension
hidden in its sheer bosom
a column of secrets lay
quietly. Wilily waiting
for the dramatic moment
to spill animus.
the orange dawn sighed wearily
as it cleared the debris
of the quarrelsome night.
Written for David’s W3 for AJ’s prompt and for the moon washed weekly challenge.
The imagery is so precise and beautiful in this piece! I especially love the final stanza. ❤
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Jaya, so glad you liked the imagery. Thank you. ❤️
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I agree with Jaya, that last stanza is fabulous. Thanks for joining in Punam 🙂 🙂
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Thanks so much, Brian. Always a pleasure when I can. 😊
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I love your words Punam. Excellent
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Thanks a lot, Sadje. Delighted that you enjoyed it.
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You’re always welcome my friend
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This poem made my mind search for the metaphor and meaning…
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Val, I hope you did find some meaning in it.
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Your words are always so beautiful and inspiring. Amazing write, Punam. ❤️
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Jeff, that’s very nice of you. Thanks a lot. ❤️
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It’s always my pleasure, Punam. ❤️
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Lovely and lulling! Loved your poem, and it is the last stanza that I really felt!! Well done! 🙏💕💕
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Pamelap, thank you so very much. ❤️
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You are so welcome 🤗 💖
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Just a note to say – Wow! I’m continually impressed with how many prompts you get put into one creation, and yet, always reads as if not planned at all, but rather as if the flow of words couldn’t exist in any other way.. ❤
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TamrahJo, thank you for your lovely compliment! I must admit I have had a few years of experience to be honest. ❤️
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I loved how the orange dawn sighed wearliy. That is exactly how some mornings feel.
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I agree, Heather, some mornings are like that! Thank you.
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You’re welcome.
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Stunning piece and love how you superbly wove the prompts with your verse. The last stanza is awesome! Bravo and thank you for joining in.
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Eugi, always humbled by your words. Thanks so very much.
Always a pleasure to join in. ❤️
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Beautiful poem. As others have said, the last stanza is particularly vivid.
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Merril, thanks so much. 💙
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You’re very welcome, Punam!
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Punam, so true that discord can be swept away and peace may return…and so comforting! Beautiful images! Idea vividly expressed! ❤
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Cheryl, thank you so much for your appreciation. Hope you are having a good Sunday. ❤️
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This truly mesmerised my mind! Tender words creatively woven together. Great job!❤️
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Jahnavi, thanks so much. ❤️
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Punam a stunning and wonderful poem.
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Thanks a lot, Kamal.
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Welcome Punam 🙏🏼
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beautifully composed Punam! 💖
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Cindy, thanks so much. 💖
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You evoke the atmosphere of a stormy night so well, Punam! ⚡️❤️
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Ingrid, glad you think so. Thank you. ❤️
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lol I can see Roy’s influence in many of your poems now … difficult to read her and not absorb some of her style 🙂
… do wish all quarrels would vanish each dawn 🙂
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You are very kind, sis but I doubt my writing is influenced by hers. I read her debut novel the year it came out…in twenty five years I have forgotten every thing about the book except the fact that I have read it. But I must admit there are many other Indian writers who do inspire me. 🙂
Perhaps most of us from the subcontinent use the English language similarly because of our schooling. 🙂
Won’t it be great if it happened! ❤️
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yes you certainly have a far more extensive use of composition than us lazy bones who grew up with the language 🙂
I wish 🙂
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❤️
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Beautiful! You are very good at interlinking words and weaving a story out of it 🙂 Have not been here in a long time, hope you are doing well, Punam 🙂
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Hi Vignesh! So good to see you after a long time! How have you been? Have you posted something?
I am well, Vignesh, but my schedule is a bit erratic these days, thus the delayed response.
Thanks a lot for reading and commenting. 🙂
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I am good, thank you 🙂 Same here with my schedule with offices having reopened 😦 Have not posted anything, but hope to soon 🙂 And you welcome 🙂
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You are welcome. I know, with offices opening our schedules have changed. Look forward to your posts. 😊
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🙂
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Gorgeous imagery., dear dear Punam.
It’s been a while and so glad to be here.
LIke how the quarrelsome night paves way for a fresh new start.
Have a lovely week, dearest. ❤
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Dear Natasha, so good to see you here! Thank you so much for your lovely words. You too, have a lovely week. ❤️
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Hugs, back at ya.<3
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Punam – I love this;;;; you know, it strikes me that the second stanza feels like a stand along haiku….
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David, thanks so much! ❤️
Ah! Wow, I am looking at it with fresh eyes and yes, with a few changes in syllable count, it can be! Thanks, again. 😀❤️
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Thanks, Eugi.
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hi, Punam!
I just want to let you know that this week’s W3 prompt, hosted by Sylvia Cognac, is now live:
Much love,
David
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Thanks, David.
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