
The half empty bottle of vitriol
that you left on my shelf
when you moved on
I take a sip from it everyday
the days, as a result, become palatable
but the nights need
something stronger
so I drink a cocktail of vitriol and torment
sometimes I add a dash of despair
and always garnish it with self-pity
but sadly it is still not potent enough
to knock me out completely
the hangover always leaves me
crying out your name in anguish.
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Well done Punam, I love how you equated vitriol and other break up related feelings and issues with alcohol and it’s hangover effects! πππ
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I took inspiration from people turning to alcohol after break up! Glad you enjoyed it, Ken. π
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Brilliant take Punam. Youβre a master wordsmith.
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Sadje, you are very kind. Much appreciated, aapa, thank you. β€οΈ
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Itβs my pleasure, always. β€οΈ
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ouch the addiction to pain .. you paint so well!
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Yeah, some people are…
Thanks, sis.
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so glad we aren’t!
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Absolutely!
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Definitely, a bitter ending with no sweeteners in sight .. so much dispair, maybe a sweet pear, to defrost the air …
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Ah! Maybe the pear will do the trick… eh, Ivor!
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Yeah. natureβs nectar
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I’m not surprised! Quite a cocktail you conjure here… This works very well in your hands and read as fresh and original work. Bravo to you!
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Scott, thank you so much!
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It’s never easy, to, deal with the haunting memories of that, lost love, and, it will, take, whole lot of time, to, finally, get over, that, broken, heart.
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Yes, never easy and it does take time.
Thank you.
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Well done – it is indeed a study in addiction – to the pain, to the memory, to the shadow of love….
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I agree, Val. Thanks a lot.
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So well crafted, this hangover from the cycle longing and despair–as others have said, an addiction.
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It does become an addiction, as I have seen. Thanks a lot, Merril.
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You’re welcome, Punam.
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yes, I see this is a thing. I’d say that the only thing the narrator didn’t try is to wear the victimhood like a badge of honor. Yeah, not drink it, but wear it. hehe. Maybe next time… You are an amazing poet, Punam. Never ever even a misplaced comma. Keep going. wonderful. thanks.
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Yup, must wear it, if there is a next time!
Selma, thanks so much for your appreciation. ππΌβ€οΈ
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This sounds like a powerful and bitter-tasting potion Punam! π§ͺ
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I guess dealing with heartbreak is, Ingrid.
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Of course! π
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Wow….this makes the pain of heartbreak palpable. Well written!
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Thanks so much, Lillian.
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Brilliant π€
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Thanks, dear friend. π
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You’re so welcome π€
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wonderful depiction Punam of what some find in a bottle. I’m all for sips tho.. cheers! π₯
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Me too! Thanks a lot! π₯
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The deepest of feelings. Gorgeously expressed, Punam. β€οΈ
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Thanks a lot, Jeff. β€οΈ
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Itβs always my pleasure, Punam. β€οΈ
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Bitter, bitter addiction.
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Indeed…very bitter.
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so I drink a cocktail of vitriol and torment
sometimes I add a dash of despair
and always garnish it with self-pity..
I had a thought… surprisingly pain is simpler to live with. Happiness is damn demanding.
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You are so right! Happiness is too demanding.
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This is absolutely brilliant writing, Punam! π I resonate with; “but the nights need something stronger
so I drink a cocktail of vitriol and torment.”
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Thanks so much, Sanaa!ππ
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Well that was superbly done. So clever….and gut-wrenching..
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Thanks a lot, Ain.
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Excellent opening line
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Thanks a lot, JYP.
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