Alas! No famous last words

I must go in for the fog is rising:
she says, a tad weakly, clutching his hand.
through clenched teeth he hisses, playfully winking:
the fog rises and falls like hourglass sand!

Though in delirium, she glares at him:
I have no will to continue living
not being melodramatic or grim
I scarce can breathe, for sure I am dying!

You spoilt my perfect last words: she does pout.
His eyes dance merrily, his voice is gruff:
get up my drama queen, go on, get out!
Last words are for fools who haven’t said enough!

Written for dVerse poetics. Today’s host, Laura says:

Select ONE phrase from these famous departing words

  • All those moments will be lost in time, like tears in rain” -Roy Batty, Blade Runner
  • My battery is low and it’s getting dark” – Mars rover ‘Opportunity’
  • A certain butterfly is already on the wing.” Vladimir Nabokov
  • I must go in for the fog is rising” Emily Dickinson
  • Ah! The times were good! It was I who was so unhappy”. Sophie Arnould, French operatic soprano
  • My anchor is well cast, and my ship, though weather-beaten, will outride the storm” Samuel Hopkins, theologian
  • Go on, get out! Last words are for fools who haven’t said enough.” Karl Marx

Then using your chosen phrase:-

  • Write a  ‘deathbed’ poem of your own imagination (time and place optional!)
  • It does not have to pertain to the author of your chosen words but can do
  • You could include backstory, personality, remembrances, other people present
  • Make it sad, funny, sudden, expected, personal or remote
  • read Billy Collins’ “Deathbeds” poem – it sets all sorts of scenes

Your poem may take any form and that includes a prose poem

OR (for those who like an extra challenge)

Write in elegiac stanzas i.e quatrains with the rhyme scheme ABAB written in iambic pentameter.


50 thoughts on “Alas! No famous last words

  1. no peace there at her ending – the quote from Marx is like a slap in the face and he is so cynical
    “the fog rises and falls like hourglass sand!”. Bravo for putting a unique slant on the prompt

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  2. Well that is quite a grim ending. Will his eyes dance merrily with our last breaths?
    I love the poetry form as well specially the line:

    the fog rises and falls like hourglass sand!

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  3. Quite a tragedy ending, but as they all would look at it this way… Reality bites! Not everyone gets a happy ending.

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  4. “Hello darkness my old friend” feels here dear Punam.

    Riveting imageries. Deeply devastating in some ways.

    Have a playful week, now my friend as you bid this darkness adieu. 🙂

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  5. So good Punam. You know I love dark.
    (A lit mag for you. It’s new, called Dark winter mag. Do try it. The editor is a fellow blogger, very friendly and approachable. Likes both dark and humorous and is not demanding at all.)

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