
Naked and bent here I stand all alone, save
for the efflorescent rocks and the parched grass
you ruin me, making mother earth my grave
your rapacious, pillaging ways so crass
one day for my brethren’s shade you’ll crave
scorched earth and rivers will be muddy morass
unsullied skies continue celestial dance
heavenly bodies shine and meteors prance!
Written for Sadje’s what do you see and Val’s scavanger hunt (ottava rima).
Love the beautiful poem Punam. The message, however is heartbreaking. Thanks for joining in
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I know, I couldn’t inject hope in this one. The extreme heat in March-April has shown to what extent we have damaged our planet. Thank you so much, Sadje.
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Yes we are reaping what we have sowed. I hope that it’s still not too late to do anything about the extreme weather!
You’re most welcome my dear sister
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I hope so too, Sadje. May we all do something before its too late.
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Amen.
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A poignant message so beautifully composed Punam ❤ !
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Thanks a lot, Radhika!❤️ Couldn’t help ponder on our earth’s plight.
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How poignant!
Though I have absolutely no talent in writing poetry, what I see is the strong braving the storm….and I feel that at the end of the storm and the winter, spring will burst forth with newness and hope!
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Whether you write poetry or not, for you the tree is a symbol of survival, for me it is the symbol of destruction. All a matter of perspective, my dear. I must have been in a negative frame of mind that I couldn’t see hope.
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Punam, this one is extraordinary! Lovely yet tragic. Well crafted! 😊
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Ami, thank you so much! 😊
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You are most welcome love!! 😊
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❤️
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Oh, Punam, this is fantastic! So expressive on so many levels 💕🙂
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Thanks a lot, Harmony! ❤️😊
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When will we learn to take better care of our only home?
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I hope we are not too late in doing that.
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Me too!
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Gorgeous writing, Punam. Earth is sending us so many urgent messages! ❤
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You are so right, Cheryl! It keeps sending messages and we ignore them at our peril. Thanks so much. ❤️
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A warning we should all heed. (K)
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Or perish…
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Your words are indeed a lament, Punam.
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I felt so sad on seeing that pic, Tracy.
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Punam this is so powerful! From the tree’s perspective it is a mournful and tragic prediction! You really made this form shine!
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Thanks so much, Val! I felt this form would be suitable for what I had in mind. Your comment validates that. ❤️
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“you ruin me, making mother earth my grave” – so powerful, this and the poem throughout! An important and urgent message to be heeded, your poem beautifully conveyed.
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Thanks a lot, Pragalbha. I was filled with immense sadness on seeing the pic. I do hope we don’t let our earth wither away.
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How haunting yet true, your words are….It pains the heart to see such devastation of trees all around.
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It does, Goutam. It is very distressing.
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Really well-written, Punam! Despair and anger for ruined nature come through so well in your words.
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Thanks a lot, Chris!
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Truth expressed viscerally and so beautifully, Punam. Amazing! ❤️
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I am touched by your words, Jeff! Thank you. ❤️
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Aww, you’re welcome, Punam! Always. ❤️
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You are right, Poonam. We have damaged our planet too much. We have to face the bitter truth. You expressed it beautifully.
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Sad but true Punam. We have to reap what we sow. Nice take.
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So we have to, Usha. Thanks so much.
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This is simply devastating, Punam…
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That is what the picture seemed to convey, David….
Thanks for reading. ❤️
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This is clearly a good piece, taking us through the feelings and situations of a life on the precipice of its doom. What a vivid scene you’ve drawn in our minds! I love it. ❤
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Thanks a lot, my friend for showering your love and taking time to read all the posts. Much appreciated.
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It was fun reading. I’d missed reading you and couldn’t stop. Thanks too and have a wonderful week. 😀
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That’s very sweet of you. Have a lovely week too. 🙂
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🙏💖💖🙏
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