Home

The lanes were familiar, the faces not. Time had not been kind to my hometown. The roads seemed bumpier and dustier, the markets crowded and disorderly.

Houses were in a state of disrepair; paint peeling off, gardens growing wild and laundry languishing on lines. In the hope of catching a glimpse of him, I wandered and I wandered.

Lonely as a cloud in a fierce sky, I scudded across the bylanes, shading my eyes. Regretting my foolhardy decision to return in the hope of a reunion.


Despondently, I trudge back to the railway-station, the burden of desolation heavier than my baggage.


As I sit forlornly on a lonely bench, waiting for my train, a familiar voice from the past calls me. I turn to find intense brown gazing at me. As I am engulfed in a tight bear hug, I know I am home.

Written for dVerse prosery. Today’s host, Lillian, says: The line I want you to include in your prose/flash fiction of 144 words or less, sans title, is “I wandered lonely as a cloud”.  Remember, you must use the line, word for word. The punctuation may be different….but the words must be there, ordered just as they were by Wordsworth, word for word.

58 thoughts on “Home

  1. This is so good, I felt it personally…though I didn’t get the happy ending of your story. Such is life 🙂 Much love to you!<3

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  2. You’ve worked with the line so well here….keeping it word for word but changing the punctuation. Works beautifully.
    I am smitten with this line: “laundry languishing on lines” I love saying it aloud. The image and the sound – both really really good.
    Yup — returning to an old place can be so many things: exhilerating, daunting, and sometimes disappointing.

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  3. I turn to find intense brown gazing at me.
    As I am engulfed in a tight bear hug,
    I know I am home.

    A classic close, Punam. A punch-line at the very end to give a happy ending to dispel the despondence of all of the earlier write-up! (it does not rightly matter who or what is ‘brown’)

    Hank

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  4. Aww the ending felt so good to read! Your prose too is full of beautiful poetic expresssions. I found it very skilful how you changed the punctuation but used the prompt words exactly!

    Like

  5. ‘Despondently, I trudge back to the railway-station, the burden of desolation heavier than my baggage.’ Could get it.. Your words filled with the warmth of a home indeed.. Much love.. 🤗💕…

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