Eyes

Chocolate eyes gaze steadily
My eyes ask, “Me?”
He thumps his tail
My innards quail

It is colder than a witch’s teat
Chilly poor feet
Wait, my eyes plead
He pays no heed

My eyes rebuking, out we go
I can’t say no
He lays warm head
On raw feet dead

Written for dVerse. Today’s host, Grace, says: write the minute poem.

The elements of the Minute Poem are:

1. narrative poetry.
2. a 12 line poem made up of 3 quatrains. (3 of 4-line stanzas)
3. syllabic, 8-4-4-4   8-4-4-4   8-4-4-4 (First line has 8 syllables of each stanza.  Remaining lines has 4 syllables in each stanza)
4. rhymed, rhyme scheme of aabb ccdd eeff.
5. description of a finished event (preferably something done is 60 seconds).
6. is best suited to light verse, likely humorous, whimsical or semi-serious.

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87 thoughts on “Eyes

  1. Kool poem! It’s funny because I’m here with my little pooch tonight. She’s a beagle with a mix of husky.
    Love dogs and I also like your simplicity in bringing words together with warmth and rhythm. Don’t get me wrong, I don’t mean it’s simple because me and you both know it’s tricky putting words together in rhythm.
    It’s always better when it rolls off the tongue easily and flawlessly, without effort as a poem should be.
    Thank you!

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    1. She must be so cute! I love dogs too. Presently I don’t have one. This is about the one we had when I was a teenager. Most adorable dog he was!
      I never get offended if my poems are called simple. I write for myself foremost. If they don’t make sense to me, how can I expect others to understand them. Thank you for your lovely compliment. 🙏🏼

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  2. It’s always those eyes! Resistance is futile! You’ve captured that minute of decision perfectly. I’ve read a few of these minute poems now and they are fun to read.

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