
“Yes, in the predawn black the slim slip of the waning moon.”
Jim Harrison
At night my terrors are watered by my tears
every passing second diminishing me
I know not what the dawn will bring
the fire that fed on the familiar wood
is now all but a mere shadow
along the bare willow boughs, wind sighs softly
am pared beyond recognition
my breath is slow tortured release
the fire-folk I relied upon for company
have all left. Leaving my slim sliver self shivering
I want to shine fiercely like a flame
does before being extinguished. The predawn black
promises the pinkest dawn in its wake
my destiny is to wane quietly.
Written for dVerse poetics. Today’s host, Linda, says: So today I am sharing with you lines from eight different pieces in the book Songs of Unreason. The challenge is to pick one line and use it as an epigraph for a poem inspired by the line. You may write your poem in any form you wish.
Thanks, Reena.
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Such rich emotional wordsmithing, Punam. It’s tough for the moon, where all light is reflected light. It’s good she knows the pinkest dawn will come.
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Li, thank you so much! ❤️ You are right, it is all reflected light, yet she yearns for more.
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You’re very welcome.
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Beautiful! The pain of the moon felt through your words.
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Thanks a lot, Sadje.
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You’re always welcome my dear sister
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❤️
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😍
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What a beautiful mystical poem!
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Thanks a lot, Barbara.
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♥️🙏🙏💐🥰
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🙏🏼❤️🥰
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Amazing! It echoes in a quiet and mysterious way.. 🙂
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Moon is mysterious na! Thanks so much, Veera! 😊
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Oh the moon, our ever-inspiring companion.
Loved the tone.
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Always. Thanks a lot, Bo.
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Wow Punam you have done a wonderful job with your profound composition. Too good.
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Thanks a lot, Kamal. So glad you think so.
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Welcome always dear Punam.
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Awesome!! I feel this one!
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Val, thank you for feeling this one.
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Gorgeous ❤️❤️❤️
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Thanks so much, dear Gab! 🙏🏼🌷❤️
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Always hon. I hope you are ok.
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I am fine, dear. Hope you are well too.
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I am glad to hear that hon. I am fine too. Just tired.
Sending lots of love.
xoxo
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Oh, take care. Sending you warm hugs.
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Thank you. Thank you> Thank you.
xoxo
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🥰🥰
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Such a lovely piece!
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Thanks a lot, Linda! It was a great prompt.
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My pleasure.
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Beautifully worded.
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Thanks a lot, Heather.
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You’re welcome.
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I love what you did making the image about yourself and how you are like the waning moon… usually dawn would be a blessing, but here it delivers a coupe de grace… just remember that soon the sliver will wax and grow large.
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You got to the heart of it, Björn. Whenever I get a chance, I can’t help writing about my namesake. Thank you.
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a great metaphor sis, you worked your magic as usual!
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Thanks, sis!🙏🏼
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This is incredibly stunning, Punam! I so love that promise of pink dawn 💝💝
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Sanaa, so glad you think so! Thanks so much. ❤️❤️
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In all thodr desperate lines there were some that shone with beauty despite the sadness…the fire that fed on the familiar wood
is now all but a mere shadow
along the bare willow boughs, wind sighs softly……….stunning, and you wanting to be the flame, but the waning pink glow the destiny….you know how to make a reader ache in empathy for you..and your poetry is that flame you speak of…..
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That is such a lovely compliment, Ain! If I can do that, I consider myself lucky! Heartfelt thanks.
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This poem is exquisite magical beautiful from head to toe, if you can say that of a poem. You do such amazing justice to the picture and the human sentiments woven in. Every line is worth reading and feeling again, I enjoyed multiple reads.
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That is so kind of you to say, Pragalbha! I feel validated when my words can touch hearts. Thank you so much. ❤️
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You are most welcome dear Punam
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I like ….fiercely like a flame
does before being extinguished…wow!
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Thanks a lot, Sangeetha! 😊
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You’re welcome …I like your mind 🙂
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Aww!🥰
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I love this part specially: I want to shine fiercely like a flame. Great imagery of the moon metaphor.
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Thanks a lot, Grace. Glad you enjoyed it.
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“I want to shine fiercely like a flame
does before being extinguished. The predawn black
promises the pinkest dawn in its wake
my destiny is to wane quietly.” Absolutely gorgeous poetry, dear Punam. I love this. ❤️
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Jeff, thanks so much, my friend for your lovely words. ❤️
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This sounds like my night during a waning moon. Love it!
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Great! Thanks a lot!
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Oh, my! How beautiful! The moon would be proud, Punam! 💖
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Aww! Such a lovely compliment, Eugi! Thank you. ❤️
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Beautiful imagery Punam. I loved your words.
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Miriam, thank you so much! 💙
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A gorgeous moon personification poem, Punam. I felt sympathy for the moon’s feelings and aspirations ❤
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Thanks so much, Sunra. 💓
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Shine fiercely .. wane quietly … Lovely aspirations in a beautifully penned poem.
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Thanks so much, Helen.
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So touching and beautifully penned, my friend. I love it. ❤
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Lamittan, thank you so much for your appreciation and your follow. 🙏🏼❤️
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You’re most welcome. 🤝 💖🌺
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This is beautifully poignant – ‘I want to shine fiercely like a flame’ and yet ‘my destiny is to wane quietly.’
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Appreciate your sharing your favourite line, Marion.
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Brilliant Punam 👏🏻❤️
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Thanks so much, Saliha. ❤️🌷
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Poor moon, she lacks confidence! Someone should tell her that she is enchanting in all of her incarnations! 🙂 Delightful poem, Punam! I love the vivid images and the charming personification of the moon! ❤
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I’ll make sure to tell her, Cheryl!😉 Thanks so much for your appreciation. ❤️
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What a beautiful and sensitive personification of the moon, Punam: stunning!
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Thanks so much, Ingrid. 🥰
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I want to shine fiercely like a flame
does before being extinguished. The predawn black
promises the pinkest dawn in its wake
my destiny is to wane quietly.
Wowowowsss.. 👏🏼👏🏼👌🏼👌🏼🤗💕
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