
Day 16
Prompt: Love (or not!)
Form: Sonnet
Marriage of true minds is all bunkum;
On seeing impediments in its way,
It proves to be not at all fair dinkum,
With trepidation it does quail!
Nor is it as steady as the north star,
In the wide inky star spangled sky.
Easily shaken by even a tempest in a jar,
Incapable to withstand every how and why!
Love is surely Time’s fool, when beauty wans
Ravaged by its relentless march.
Love flies out of the window if visits to salons
Fail. Unable to withstand Time’s forward charge.
If at all thee thinketh love can last forever,
A bigger fool than thy, can there be never!
(Taking liberty to turn sonnet 116 on its head😅)
Haha! Really good Punam. The modern face of love.
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Hehe! Thanks, Sadje. I enjoyed writing it.
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You’re welcome my dear 😻
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Nicely done!
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Thanks a lot!
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Most welcome.
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You’re a mastermind, turning a classic into an epic modern version! Fantabulous!
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Thanks for your fulsome praise, Sahana. ❤️
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Haha: the line about the salon made me laugh 🤣 ❤️
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😂😂 That’s the first word that came to my mind to rhyme with wan! 😅
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Ha! Brilliant, Punam. Beautifully used language, evoking awesome imagery and feelings that continue for the reader. ❤️
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Thanks so much, Jeff! It eas fun to write. ❤️
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You’re most welcome, Punam. Always! ❤
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love this douse of realism woven from the bards own words … salon, aging are mere excuses 🙂
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Thanks so much, sis! 🙂
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always welcome precious 🙂
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This made me smile!!
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I am glad it did, Val!
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a very sassy sonnet Punam. Wow you are doing the October writing challenge, am cheering you on and hope to read as many of your fantastic poems as I can.
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I like sassy, Gina! Thanks a ton. I am delighted to have you cheering for me. Means a lot.
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You made me laugh with your wit and Aussie colloquism.
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Guess what! This was languishing in spam! Thanks, Tracy. I had fun with this one.
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It happens. 🥴
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Wow, excellent sonnet, Punam. You changed it very nicely. Lovely poem.
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Thanks so much, Kamal. Glad you enjoyed it.
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Yes too good. Welcome 🙏🏻🙏🏻🙏🏻🙏🏻
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Ha! Whoever said that love has to be an integral part of a marriage? I wonder!
Marriage is transactional (apologies to all those who romantisize it). It is a bond between 2 people with the government as a witness that gives you the certificate for it.
Love, on the other hand, does not need permission (not even the permission of the person you love).
When love exists in a marriage, it’s great. It’s just not a pre-requisite or something needed to sustain it 😉
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Whoa! Don’t get me started on what Shakespeare meant. It will be back to school. 😂😂
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wonderful punam! A really great poem here! ❤
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Thanks a lot, dear. ❤️
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What a clever transformation, Punam! You made me smile. ❤ I especially liked "tempest in a jar."
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Delighted that you liked that phrase, Cheryl. Always appreciate your insights and kind words. ❤️
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😂😂 that’s the first word that came to my mind to rhyme with wan! 😅
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