Patient autumn waits in wings on tiptoes
monsoon is reluctant to quit limelight
loath to retire for annual repose
thunder gleefully claps with all its might
susurrus leaves wait for a cue to fall
to colour earth stage in feuille morte shades
rain desires dazzling last hurrah for all
to be special. So, brazenly invades
autumn’s space, falling in gushing cascades.
Written for MTB at dVerse. Today’s host Laura says: Since today is the 9th of the 9th month it is fitting for that numeral to inform today’s poetry form – so let’s meet The Novelinee.
Novelinee is a nine line stanza poem overlaid with this rhyme sequence:
a,b,a,b,c,d,c,d,d
It is written in iambic pentameter or 10 syllable lines (decasyllabic) with alternate stresses.
very nicely composed and rhymed -“in feuille morte shades” what a marvellous line!
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Thank you so much, Laura! Loved the challenge.
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wow awesome writing sis! This is a tricky one so I’ve noted it for further use as time permits 🙂 teachers pet …
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Lol all are teacher’s pets. It is a tricky form…again syllable counting…but I enjoyed it. Thanks, sis.
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pleasure
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Ah, the rainy season is indeed loath to quit center stage. Love the visuals created by your words Punam
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It sure seems so, Sadje. This past week it has been raining quite a bit. Is it the same in Lahore? Amritsar doesn’t get much rains though.
Thanks so much, dear.
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For the last two days there have been a lot of rainfall in Lahore, lots of places are flooded now.
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Oh! Here too there is a warning of heavy rainfall tomorrow.
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Stay safe my dear
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Your words have painted a stunning imagery Punam ❤️
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Thanks so much, Radhika. Glad you liked it. ❤️
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This atmospheric poem brings the monsoon to a dramatic close, Punam! ⚡️
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Thanks a lot, Ingrid. 😊
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Gorgeous piece! You’ve personified the seasons sooo beautifully… 😍
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Thanks a lot, dear Sahana. ❤️😊
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Monsoons. That’s how the rain fell this year. And it’s true, they were the stubborn kind.
Loved: “rain’s desire dazzling last hurrah for all”
Such lovely words. Thanks for sharing.
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Thanks a lot, Selma. So appreciate your words.
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Some beautiful word pictures…the first line drew me in “autumn waits in wings on tiptoes” ..wonderful anticipation!
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Ah! Thanks a lot, Heather.
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The use of rare words here takes you to another world.
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Thanks a lot!
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Lovely picture of monsoon you’ve painted here, Ma’am. 🙂
“rain’s desire dazzling last hurrah for all
to be special. ” lovely line.
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Thanks a lot, Aishwarya.
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You are welcome, Ma’am. 🙂
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Wow, Punam such a wonderful poem. Loved the stunning picture of the rain.
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Thanks so much, dear Kamal.
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Welcome dear Punam 🙏🏼😊
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So full of sound and motion–I can almost see, hear, and feel this monsoon rain!
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This crackles with the tension of a thunder storm! The rhymes are tight and the words flow! I think this novelinee is beautiful!!
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Ahhh…reminds me of many a monsoon. Elegantly crafted, Punam. So beautiful. ❤️
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this is a delight for the moon and the monsoon!
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Ah! Thank you so much.
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Reblogged this on The Reluctant Poet.
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🙏🏼🤗❤️
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Always a joy and pleasure to read and share your posts with followers, My Dear! Hope you have a great day!! xoxox 😘💕🎁🌹
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You too, have a great day! ❤️🌷
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Rainy day season superbly expressed! The Novilinee artfully crafted, Punam.
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Thanks a lot, Eugi!
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I love this Punam. Nothing like going out with a bang! This line is exquisite ‘susurrus leaves wait for a cue to fall’ Ahhhh ☺️❤️
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Thanks so much, Christine! ☺️💞
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Wow, this is an elegant and beautiful piece! Not only does the rhyme scheme make each line perfect on the tongue, but the syllable count gives it a lyrical touch too. ❤
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Thanks so much, Jaya. ❤️
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Lovely imagery, Punam! I so enjoyed the way your personified each type of weather and season. My favourite was the gleeful clap of thunder; somehow I identified with that! (Perhaps that makes me a naughty person). I also liked the image of patient autumn waiting in the wings on tiptoe ❤
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Thanks so much, Sunra! I am delighted you enjoyed the thunder imagery. (I guess writing it makes me a naughty person too!😉) So appreciate your words. ❤️
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The thought of monsoon for me is so alien… I can understand how people wait for the rain, and yet I assume that sometimes it’s simply to much and sometimes you need more.
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We are mainly an agrarian country which is still dependent on good rains for a good harvest. You are right sometimes it rains too much, sometimes it falls short.
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Dramatic and well-deserving of thunderous applause, Punam.
pax,
dora
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Aww! Thanks so much, Dora. 🙏🏼
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‘Patient autumn waits in wings on tiptoes
monsoon is reluctant to quit limelight
loath to retire for annual repose
thunder gleefully claps with all its might’
Loved it punam.. Just loved the whole piece.. 👍🏻🥰👌🏻👌🏻👌🏻
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Thank you so, so much re…🙏🏼🥰🤗❤️
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Exquisite poem. ❤ Vividly expressed, Punam!
We have had a very wet rainy season here in SW Florida, but now we seem to be having an occasional day without an afternoon shower. Fall is on its way! 🙂 all the best!
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Thanks so much, Cheryl. ❤️
September has seen some heavily rainy days here. Fall will be here in October. 🙂
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That is some vivid description Punam. Wonderfully written.
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Thanks so much, Vignesh. So happy you liked it.
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Welcome 🙂
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Beautiful poetry and form.
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Thanks so much, dear Jude. 💙
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