Listen to Rain memories by User 952730347 on #SoundCloud https://soundcloud.app.goo.gl/W9mHv
As I stand under the grey skies
Raindrops pelting my face
I miss your arms wrapped around me
Rains always bring back your memories.
The sweet tea lingers on my tongue
Reminding of your voice so sweet
Strained ears hear only your footsteps
Rains always bring back your memories.
Saltiness on my lips
Tastes of regrets buried deep
What ifs torment my tortured soul
Rains always bring back your memories.
I long for the frosty embrace of winter
My feelings back in the deep freeze
Hibernate my achy heart will
Gosh! I don’t want rains to bring back your memories.
Written for dVerse. Ingrid says: Begin to compose a poem without putting pen to paper: you can say the words in your head, or repeat them out loud. Record them, if you wish, as an aid to memory. Try to complete the poem as far as possible without writing it down. Think about the devices discussed above: regular rhythms, repeated phrases or ‘motifs’, alliteration and rhyme schemes – anything to aid the memory and help the words to flow. Alternatively, why not compose a stream-of-consciousness poem orally, recording the words as they come to you?
Oh yay! You managed to include the sound recording too
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Yes, Shweta! I finally did. 😊❤️
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How wonderful to hear you reading your poem Punam – thank you for including this ❤️
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Thank you, Ingrid, for this opportunity to get over my hesitation. Had it not been for you, I wouldn’t have attempted. ❤️
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I’m so glad you did ❤️
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Loved hearing your poem Punam
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Thanks so much, dear Sadje.
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You’re welcome! It was lovely to hear you read your poem.
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🙏🏼❤️
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👍
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It was wonderful to hear this! I liked the background of rain, birds, and traffic–it’s like we’re there with you. 😀
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Thanks a lot, Merril. Yes, recording in the balcony proved to be the perfect backdrop. Thanks for gently goading me to make an effort to post the recording. ❤️
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I so enjoyed the recording. The background added to the ambiance of the piece.
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Thanks so much, Heather. I had to record the audio in the balcony as all the rooms were occupied with work/classes going on. And that proved to be a blessing. 😊
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It was a blessing 😊
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Though there isn’t a definite beat to this, the repetition of the final line in the stanza gives it a wild rhythm all of its own, like rain and memories.
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I had been chanting a different poem but there was no vacant room to record because of work/classes from home. I stepped out into the balcony of my apartment. It was raining and the final line of the stanza got stuck in my mind. I am glad you found a wild rhythm in it. Thank you. 🙂
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That’s how it happens, and rain has a rhythm all its own.
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So it does…a beautiful one at that.
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🙂
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A longing poem couched in what if. Memories caught up in rain. Moving poem.
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Thanks a lot, Bev.
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How lovely your voice …. and your poetry.
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Helen, so appreciate your compliment. Thank you!
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Oh this is wonderful Punam! Loved hearing your reading as well😍🥰
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Thanks so much, my dear. 🥰🥰
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Lovely post ♥️
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Thanks a lot, Saliha.❤️
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I love this Punam and I LOVE hearing your voice!! Complete with local background sounds — gives it a landscape. :)) Thank you for sharing. 😊💗🎶
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Aww! Thanks so much, dear. I like the idea of giving it a landscape:)❤️😊🙏🏼
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Took the words right out of my mouth, Lia… Punam’s voice is so gentle 🙂
❤
David
P.S. and a lovely, poignant poem to boot, Punam!
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David ❤️🤗
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Enjoyed hearing you read this! Your verses are full of melancholy and beauty, very similar to rain! ☔
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Aww! Such a lovely compliment. Thank you, Tricia. ❤️
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where did my comment go?
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Lol I had to create a new post for the audio to work. Everyone was reading the first post and commenting that the audio was not working, so I removed that post. Sorry, sis. 😔
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lol do you want me to praise you again, you know you nailed it!
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Lol no. But you did again. 😂
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🙂 that’s what sisters are for 🙂
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❤️
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Rain often feels so depressing, maybe it’s too close to tears.
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Maybe, that’s the reason.
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Such a beautiful reminiscence of love, loss, and the myriad of feelings that can overwhelm us at any time. I also love the awareness in this piece. Beautiful, Punam. ❤
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Thanks so much, Jeff, for your beautiful comment. Rains seem to reinforce such feelings. So appreciate your words. ❤️
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Punam,
Ah, this touched my heart. And your reading was exquisite, with the rain and the sounds of birds and horns in the background, as if waiting outside to hear those beloved footsteps once more. Enjoyed all the poetic power you brought to this one.
pax,
dora
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Dora, thanks so much. 🙏🏼❤️
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I read it and then listened to the recording! I loved hearing your voice!! I would have thought the rain would wash away those memories….
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Rain is strange, Val. It can wash away some memories and at other times bring them back to life. Thanks so much.
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This is such a beautiful poem Punam. Wonderful.
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Vignesh, so appreciate your compliment. Thank you. 🙏🏼☺️
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Welcome 🙂
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Beautifully woven the serenity of myriad voices was soothing
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Thanks so much, Shantanu.
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You are welcome
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Punam your voice is so soothing and lovely. Such a marvelous poem, loved every stanza.
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Aww! Thanks so much, Kamal. ❤️
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Welcome always Punam 🙏🏼😊😊😊
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Beautiful sweetheart.
xoxo
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Thanks, my dear. 😊❤️🌷
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My pleasure 🥰❤️🌹🥰❤️🌹
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🥰❤️🙏🏼😊
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Reblogged this on The Reluctant Poet.
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Thanks a lot, Chuck.
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Always a joy and pleasure to read and share your posts with followers, My Dear! Hope you have a great day!! xoxox 😘💕🎁🌹
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Wishing you a good day too! ❤️🌷
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This is absolutely gorgeous! 😀 I especially love; “The sweet tea lingers on my tongue/Reminding of your voice so sweet/Strained ears hear only your footsteps/Rains always bring back your memories.”💝💝
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Sanaa, thanks so much! I guess you are a tea lover like me! 😀❤️
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My son asked me yesterday when it’s gonna snow. I figure, we’re never satisfied. When it’s raining, we bitch. When it’s super hot, we bitch all the same.
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Nope, we are not. Always aching for what is not.
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Wonderful post
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Thanks, Pratik.
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love this one Punam! And the audio you provided was so cool! ❤
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