Val of A Different Perspective is running the End of Summer Scavenger Hunt, where we have to write 13 poems in August in the prescribed form on the given topics.
10. Octina on Revenge
Sweet Revenge
As she runs the bath for her beloved
Filling it with bubbles and froth
She hums to herself an old forgotten ditty
Talking of love and betrayal, it doth
She picks up the pile of clothes from the corner
Out falls a photo of a pretty maiden on the floor
It has her beloved’s name on the back
Her heart has been asunder tore!
Filled with rage, the photo she tore
She recalls recent aloofness of her beloved
She is certainly not the kind to try to win him back
She needs her sweet revenge, her mouth froths
She plots and draws up a plan on floor
Humming under her breath “better than revenge” ditty
Wrath overtakes her, love has turned a corner
He has no clue, nor an inkling he doth!
Her crafty mind thinks of a devious plot, it truly doth!
She gets mightily busy though her heart it tore
He calls to tell he’s held up in traffic’s clutch at the office corner
Enough time for her to plan what to do with her beloved
She will be dressed like a siren, singing his favourite ditty
Tired and weary as he would come back
Candles and jasmine to pretty the floor
Though her innards did pretty much froth!
She offers him his favourite chilled bubbly with froth
Bites the bait with gullibility, upon my word, he doth!
Clutching his throat he is sprawled on the floor
The poison, as planned, did his gullet tore
All spent, he lies lifeless on his back
The torn photo still fluttering in a corner
She hums feverishly her favourite ditty
As she bids goodbye to her beloved!
A frothy office affair and there was no turning back
Revenge doth make one turn a corner
Dead and spent on the floor like a forgettable ditty
She tore away forever from her heart, thoughts of her beloved.
Oh my. Dark but the heart of a woman scorned can be dark and revenge is even darker. You nailed it
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Revenge can take one to a very dark place Thanks so much, Dee.
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It sure can. My motto: leave it to karma 😱 what goes around vines right back around 🤯
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True that. 👍🏼
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Beautifully written tale of revenge. Love how you used Shakespearean English to give it more impetus👌👌
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Thanks a lot, Sadje. Yes, I enjoyed using it. 🙏🏼
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You’re welcome my dear friend!
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Ah! This was a devilish tale and done in excellent octina fashion! Love the word choices especially froth and doth! You made this prompt look easy!!
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Believe me, Val, it was not easy AND that’s the reason I am ecstatic that you find it devilish!! Thanks a ton! 😄
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Hell hath no fury like a woman scorned. Thou has done full justice to the prompt. Beautifully written, Punam
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I thank thee, milady Shweta! 😊❤️
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Thou art most welcome. T’was my pleasure
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❤️😄🤗
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This bloodthirsty tale of revenge definitely has a Gothic feel to it – nice work!
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Thanks a lot, Ingrid! 🙂
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Wow she sounded very bloodthirsty and fiery wife and you have killed the poem, Punam. Awesome.
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Lol Kamal. Thanks, dear.
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You are always welcome dear Punam 🙏🏼😊😊😊😊
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Wow! What an awesome poem, Punam. Your mastery of language is always so refreshing. Just wonderful, my friend. ❤️
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Your appreciation makes my day, Jeff! Thanks, my friend. ❤️
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Aww, your most welcome, dear Punam! Always. ❤
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🙏🏼❤️
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lol all said above … ditto! you ravished the prompt just as she ravished revenge 🙂
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😉 revealing my darker side!
Thanks, sis.
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your underbelly is indeed scary, but guessing your hubby must know that by now 🙂
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😉some things must be kept a secret, even from soulmates! Lol
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lol now I’m shivering …. trembling, concerned, unsure …
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Hahaha…(sadly you can’t hear the evil undertones)….grinning devilishly.
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ouch was that a sharp stab under my rib cage 😉
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Ooh! I was just aiming to give a snick! 😉 Take care, sis.
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lol I’ll live … for an hour or two anyway 🙂
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Liar!! Lol
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well we never know when we’ll go 😉
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That is the truth.
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Speechless! Loved it.
I have never been able to understand the emotions of jealousy or envy (pros of being too self-consumed – lol)
or need for revenge …..
but this definitely made to ‘feel’ the anger and rage and desire for revenge!
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I always find revenge stories deliciously exciting! Lol
Translated my love for them in a verse.
Thanks a ton.
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Her strong emotions of love, I guess gave he the courage to take the revenge.
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Love can move mountains and can certainly lead to crimes of passion. Thanks for reading, Vandana.
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Whoaaaa…this brought me back to the Shakespearian era …the language use…my oh my…like reading Hamlet again..
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You are too kind, Mich! Thanks heaps, my friend.
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My, my! That got too dark too quickly! 😨 Sent a chill down my spine. Loved that you used Shakespeare’s dialect on this one. Made it more powerful. Wow, revenge can be dangerous! A genius work with the prompt! 😀👌
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Thanks so much, Sahana for your generous praise! 🙏🏼😊
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Oh wow. This is a poem as well as a dark story. So well written Punam!
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Revenge tends to be dark. Thanks for enjoying it. 🙂
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True. Welcome 🙂
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Woah! You are a master in your vocabulary and revenge is works in the reverse way most of the poem. Brilliant poem, as usual! 😉👏🏻
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Your comment landed in the spam.folder! Thanks a lot, Hema. Revenge does work that way.
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Most of the time*
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Wow you write poetry like a gripping thriller in the making – just brilliant!!!
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Delighted that you think so! Thanks so much, Pragalbha.
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You are very welcome 🙏🏼💛🌹
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Wow!! This poem is absolutely marvellous Punam! I’m blown away. Wow❤
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Love your wows! Thanks so much, Ishita. ❤️😊
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Distempered, she eateth the forbidden fruit forthwith. Perchance revenge doth lend it sweetness!
A delicious poem, Punam! 🙂
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Ah! Love it Cheryl! ❤️
Thanks so much. 🙂
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That was intense.
Its a nice ballad. One of my favorites, I will say.
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How wonderful! Thanks a lot.
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You are so good at these Punam and you have really nailed this one. I found it very moving.
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Thanks so much, Lorraine.
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