this fortress has no drawbridge
I see no way that I can breach
the tall unwelcoming walls
I have knocked umpteen times
I get no reply
I can feel the foreboding vibes
a coldness that makes me shiver
as my overtures are repelled
never seen an occupant
yet it’s stark emptiness calls me compellingly
on the nights of the silent moon
darkened winds draw me in
my curiosity birthed of haunting
I have a habit of homing into hearts
I will keep trying to make this devastated heart a home.
Written for dVerse Poetics: outside looking in
That’s a Wonderful take.
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Thanks so much, Vignesh.
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I love this poem Punam! Keep on trying!
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Aww, Sadje! I sure will. Thanks a lot. ❤️
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You’re welcome my dear
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Amazing capture of what a friend of mine used to tell me about me and the walls I had built around me…
And what a boon people like you are those who are unable to let down their walls easily.
Once you weave in your way through, those with walls understand how beautiful it is to let the sun in!
Thank you so much for being that person 🙂
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Thank you, Shiwani, for sharing this. ❤️
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Marvellous, Punam! 💕
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Ishita, thank you! ❤️
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So beautiful and stunning, Punam. The final few lines made me tear up a bit—every home could use some love from within. That’s what makes it home and I find it beautiful how you convey it here with a certain tenderness and mystery. Climbing those walls is never easy, but if let in, Shiwani is right—it’s beautiful when you can trust in the right heart and person. I resonate with that myself and as well in this piece. ❤️💕
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Lucy, thank you so much. That it resonates with you means so much. ❤️❤️
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Superbe write! 😀A great and empathetic metaphor, very well executed and constructed.👏👏👏
🙏
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Thank you so much! 😊🙏🏼
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You are most welcome 😃🙏
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Brilliant poem! The last two lines especially are pure magic! 💖
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Thanks a lot! I am so glad you think so. 💞
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Beautiful imagery and sentiments in this poem, Punam ❤
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Thanks a lot, Sunra. ❤️
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Beautiful imagination so well composed, Punam. Too good.
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Thanks a lot, dear Kamal.
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You are most welcome dear Punam.
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a most enjoyable read- you have nicely blurred the line between edifice and personification
“I have a habit of homing into hearts” my favourite line
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Thank you for pointing out your favourite line. My muse wouldn’t let me write otherwise.
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Love the symbolism of the drawbridge – effective. Apologies, if I am slow in response. Life and all that. Keep writing. You have talent. P & L Stella.
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Thank you, Stella. No apologies, please. Life happens. Your comments always mean a lot.
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The picture paint with words … I understand how it is drawing you in. Compelling you to come close. Come inside.
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Aww! Thanks, Helen, for letting me in.
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Oh my goodness this is so poignant 💔
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Thanks, Ingrid. 🙏🏼
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powerful Punam, you are wowing d’Verse, knew you could dazzle them!
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Thanks, Kate. They are an awesome lot… generous and welcoming.
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very, enjoy!
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I have a habit of homing into hearts
I will keep trying to make this devastated heart a home.
Just so stunning beautiful throughout, it touches me deep within.
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That it touched you deep within, means a lot! Thanks a lot, Pragalbha. 🙏🏼💙
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🙏🏼💛
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Brilliant, as always, dear Punam. As with Pragalbha, I love the line “I have a habit of homing into hearts.” Lovely, dear friend. ❤
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Ah! That’s great. Thanks a lot, Jeff, for your kind words always. ❤️🙏🏼
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You’re most welcome, my friend. Always, always. 🙏❤
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Awwww so beautiful Punam😊😊😊
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Thanks, dear. 😊😊
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Castles are like that
Hearts unfortunately can be too
Perseverance will prevail
Lovely write
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I agree, perseverance does pay.
Thanks so much.
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Wow, what an ending. Magical.
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Thanks a lot, Bo.
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Very compelling, Punam! Sparkling imagery! ❤
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Thanks so much, Cheryl. ❤️
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