Absence makes the heart grow fonder – proverb
The day goes by in painful slow motion
so not unlike the others before
segueing shamefacedly, silhouetted
against the reluctant, recalcitrant night fall
loneliness, my constant handmaiden,
drowns me in a downpour of misery
these days I don’t feel whole anymore
a part of me left with you when you left
I am trying to fathom what part am I missing
is it my hands, which on their own volition seek you
remembering your beloved contours
or my skin that yearns for your touch
now feels starved, parched and dry
my eyes maybe, for they see without seeing
forever wanting to drink your sight
my ears too seem to be straining to hear your voice
its undulating cadence and huskiness
perhaps it is my heart, which though still with me
beats as if against its will
torn in two, it pumps silent tears
and I roam around the home touching things,
drinking them up with my eyes
listening to the silence and telling my heart to beat again
trying hard to be whole in your absence.
Beautiful!
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Thank you!
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Beautifully written Punam.
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Thanks a lot, Sadje.
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Always my pleasure 😇
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Outstanding. I lost myself in your words. Excellent writing.
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That’s such a lovely thing to say! Thanks so much, Jude. 💙
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stunning Punam, you’ve captured that absence so well … your use of words is legendary!
“against the reluctant, recalcitrant night fall” everything even the day and night slow down to cry when your love is at sea …
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Aww! Thanks heaps, sis. ❤️
Have had a lot of practice in living alone.
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exactly, so you could articulate well that sense of loss 🙂
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Wow, love this!💕💕
“loneliness, my constant handmaiden,”
❤
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Thanks so much, my dear. Glad you liked it. ❤️😊
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❤
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I’ve lost a lot of parts myself. I wonder if we can be whole ever again. (probably not)
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I doubt if that would be possible…
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So I thought.
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Absolutely amazing! The words so raw touch the heart, mind and soul!
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Thanks a lot, Shreya.
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feeling the whole essence of this beautiful poem Punam 🙂 Lovely ❤
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Nima, delighted you could feel it. Thanks a lot. ❤️🙂
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My pleasure Punam 😄
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A very deeply sad heartfelt poem! Well done.
Dwight
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Dwight, thanks a lot.
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You are welcome!
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I lost myself in this one. Excellent write.
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Heather, I truly appreciate that! Thank you.
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My pleasure.
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Punam, this is so beautiful and mesmerizing. 💕
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Lucy, thank you. ❤️
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You’re welcome. ❤️
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‘trying to be whole in your absence’ … heartbreaking and near impossible to achieve. Beautifully composed …
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Helen, so appreciate it. Thanks.
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Fantastic and to feel numb when we lose someone dear to us. Superb poem, Punam 🙏🏼🙏🏼👍🏼
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Thanks a lot, dear Kamal. 🙏🏼🙏🏼
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Welcome always dear Punam 🙏🏼😊😊😊😊
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This absence seems like a hole in the heart–the yearning is palpable. (K)
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Yes, it feels like that. Thanks a lot.
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What an exquisite beautiful weave of words, reading your poem is a feeling experience 💛✨
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That means a lot. Thanks a lot.
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🙏🏼💛
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Ah, such sadness there is here, Punam! I am lit against the proverb; how hard it tries to be true but, in the face of grief, it flickers before strength.
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Jaya, that is so true. Thanks so much.
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Oh that pain so well depicted
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Thanks, Shantanu.
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My absolute pleasure
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Such painfully beautiful words painted Punam. Enjoyed your poetic imagery of the proverb 💕
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Thanks a lot, Radhika. ❤️
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Oh this is heart-achingly sad and beautiful, Punam! I love your use of alliteration here, it’s so effective 💔
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Thanks so much, Ingrid. 🙏🏼
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Amazing poem, Ma’am. I always end up learning a new word or two through your poems. 🙂
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Aishwarya, you are very kind. Thanks a lot, dear.
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You are welcome, Ma’am. 🙂
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Such a beautiful poem. Thank you! Those first lines have such a lovely sound and rhythm, and this struck me as so poignant:
“I am trying to fathom what part am I missing
is it my hands, which on their own volition seek you”
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Appreciate your reading, Merril. Thanks so much.
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You’re very welcome!
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My, my, dear Punam; what exquisite language. You’ve drawn out the exactness of brokenness, and the yearning for the wholeness to once again be complete. I love this poem, my friend. ❤❤
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I am so pleased that you love this verse! Thanks a lot, dear friend. ❤️🙏🏼
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You’re welcome, Punam. Always my pleasure, my dear friend. 🙏❤
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A beautiful tender poem, Punam ❤ I love the lines:
"….silhouetted
against the reluctant, recalcitrant night fall
loneliness, my constant handmaiden,
drowns me in a downpour of misery."
But the whole poem is wonderful despite its sadness 🙂
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Sunra, thank you so much for your appreciation. 😊❤️
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Gorgeous, gorgeous, gorgeous write 💝💝
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Thanks a lot, Sanaa. ❤️
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Punam I’m late to the party and everyone has taken all the words of praise I’d use to describe this poem. It really is outstanding and makes the heart ache…
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Val, the party is still on! Lol
Thanks so much.
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Punam, those waves of frantic longing for a loved one are hard to endure.
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I so agree with you. Thanks for reading. 🙂
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You’re very welcome.
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Wow just wow Punam…i am mesmerized..
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Thanks a lot, dear Mich. ❤️
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Extraordinary lines! Conveyed the proverb through a wonderful poem… 🙏🤍
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That’s very kind of you. Thanks so much. 🙏🏼💙
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Wow! This is wonderful Punam! ❤
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Glad you think so. Thank you!💞
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