Chaos swirls gleefully around my ankles
threatening to drown me forever
sleep hurriedly plays hooky from half-hooded lids
leaving behind gritty, distorted vision
love strangles my neck in a sweet embrace
neither dead nor alive, I hang in limbo
in this twilight zone of suspended nothingness
lingering clandestinely, I look for foresight
hindsight only twists a rusted knife through my tortured soul
the sullen desolation in the pit of my stomach
screams tedious tales that I would rather not tell
wily words slyly tiptoe from the tips of my fingers
writing somber stories that were never intended.
I can relate to this as a writer. The last lines are wonderful, “wily words slyly tiptoe from the tips of my fingers writing somber stories that were never intended.” Sometimes what comes out may not be intended but may nonetheless be necessary to unburden the heart and mind…
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So true, I have allowed free flow writing on so many occasions only to be completed surprised with what comes out.
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I agree, Jenna! It can be unnerving too.
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You are so right, Val. Our subconscious gets the better of us at times!
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The feelings crafted are distressing. Always love your use of words and weaving.
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Always appreciate your wholehearted support, Kritika. Thanks so much. ā¤ļø
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My pleasure always š (heart)
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So intense and moving Punam.
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Thanks a lot, Sadje. All the pent up emotions are finding their way out through words.
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I understand this. Take care.
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Very powerful sweetheart.
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Thanks so much, dearest. ā¤ļø
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My pleasure š„°š¹
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Sometimes it is necessary to unburden the bottled emotions Punam. ā¤ļø
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Absolutely right,, Radhika! Thanks so much, dear. ā¤ļø
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Impressive and intense poem, Punam. Nice to see you coming out with your emotions in this lovely poem.
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Kamal, thanks kindly for your wonderful words of appreciation. šš¼š¤
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You are always welcome dear Punam.šš»šš»šš»š¤š¤š¤
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Very beautifully expressed Dear Punam ā¤ļø
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Thanks so much, dear Sarika. ā¤ļø
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Punam, I feel such anguish pouring from your fingertips. My sincere and fervent hopes that these things are cast away from you in a mighty wind that blows them far far into the desert where they turn to grains of sand and harm you no more.
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What a wonderful wish, Li! Thanks so much, dear friend. I am blessed to have such friends as you. ā¤ļø
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You’re welcome ā¤
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Very relatable.
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Yup…we are all in the same boat.
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Punam, this evokes a tortured night in the life of a writer. Relatable and powerful! ā¤ Sometimes it is appropriate to express feelings of distress in our writing. That is an honest thing to do in that moment.
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Cheryl, so appreciate your feedback. Honesty in writing does help. Thanks so much. ā¤ļø
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My, my, I am so glad to read your work again, Punam. This is a glorious exploration of the shared human experience, brought to life through your wonderful lens. I love it so. ā¤šš
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Jeff, your comment is so uplifting! Thanks a lot, my friend. ā¤ļøšš¼
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I’m so glad to know this, Punam. Wonderful. You’re most welcome, my dear friend. Happy Sunday to you. ā¤ļøš
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It is so good to read your work again. Beautiful world play
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You are very kind, Shantanu. Thanks a lot.
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My absolute pleasure
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incredibly relatable … the torture and anguish of constant lockdown, concern for family’s well being and life in general at this time … so well expressed!
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Thanks, sis. Feelings do find release through words.
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absolutely they do, or talk to someone you trust!
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Punam, I am so relating to this poem! Thanks for putting words on how I feel! Love to you my dear friend!
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Carol, I am so glad my words resonated! Much love to you too. ā¤ļø
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I’m so glad to have you here Punam my dear, you’ve got my email if ever you need a good chat! š„°ā¤ļøā¤ļø
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Thanks so much, dear, on both counts. šš¤ā¤ļø
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You’re welcome my dear.š¤ š„°ā¤ļø
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Oh my Punamā¦ the heaviness of these beautifully written words tears at my heart. āhindsight only twists a rusted knife through my tortured soulā
Iām sending you lots of love ā¤ļøā¤ļø
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Rachel, I am so grateful for you love and loving words. Bless you, dear friend. ā¤ļøā¤ļø
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Very dramatic and intense. I love the way you evoke our emotions ā¤ļø
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Aww! So appreciate your compliment. ā¤ļø
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