Sometimes
the jumbled neurons are a dense tangled web
not letting a shard of sense to penetrate
yet the synaptic cleft is a coarse sieve
through which dark, biased thoughts slither
into the cauldron of disquiet subconscious
poisoning the process of perception
infiltrating the inviolable memory bank
leaving long held beliefs comatose
the communication between
the conscious and the subconscious
totters on the verge of total collapse
But then
learned behaviour kicks in
an antidote to the tenebrous paralysis
sometimes a battle is won or two lost
in this ongoing exhausting war
the surface calm belying the struggle within
giving up often seems the best recourse
stubborn heels dig in then.
Welcome back! Nice one π
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Thanks a lot, Satyen. Hope you have been well. π
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Very impressive–deep, subtle power within the lines. So good to see you, Punam–you’re invited to my b’day party today! π
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Thanks a lot, my dear! I will hop over in a jiffy!π
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You’re so welcome–thank you for Everything!π
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ooh you haven’t lost your touch sis!
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Thanks a lot, sis!β€οΈ
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Mindfield seems like a minefield.
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It does, Sadje.
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So good! An apt description of the struggle between perception, belief, attitude and the subconscious.
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Thank you so much, Val. It does become difficult at times to be discerning.
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Wow Punam! This was WONDERFUL!!!
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Thank you so much, my dear!β€οΈ
How have you been?
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Most welcomeπ
I’ve been great! How was your break?
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Good to know that! My break was good. πβ€οΈ
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βnot letting a shard of sense to penetrateβ great line!! Love this poemβ€οΈ I can so relateπ
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Thanks so much, Sue. π
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A powerful debut after your hiatus!
yet the synaptic cleft is a coarse seive
through which dark, biased thoughts slither
into the cauldron of disquiet subconscious
poisoning the process of perception –love this!
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Thanks so much, Heather! β€οΈ
I tried reading my own mind during the break. π
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Oh my, definitely could be walking into a mindfield, but oh so necessary sometimes. You are very welcome.
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I agree…so necessary!
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Beautiful poem Punam. The finale is excellent.
“sometimes a battle is won or two lost
in this ongoing exhausting war
the surface calm belying the struggle within
giving up often seems the best recourse
stubborn heels dig in then.”
xoxoxo…
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My dearest Gabriela, thank you so very much! Your presence here means so much. π·β€οΈπ€
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My pleasure πππΈπΉβ€οΈ
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A triumph, Punam! β€ You have beautifully expressed how the human will overcomes adversity! β€
All the best! Cheryl
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Thanks so much, Cheryl. Appreciate your compliment. β€οΈ
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Love the way you have described what happens in the neurons of the head π
While this is how a typical Mindfield works, mindfulness is a great way to make sure that the biases do not slip through the ‘coarse sieve’. Mindfulness helps make the sieve finer!
The ‘learned behavior’ that provides respite is also such a bummer especially it comes from a place of prejudice, bias, and/or unawareness, leaving us forever in a state of unconsciousness!
I hope that each one of us understands this and works towards awareness and exploration π
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I strayed into your field of expertise with this one isn’t it?π
Totally agree about mindfulness and the learned behaviour. “Learned behaviour” here was used more in the sense of muscle memory, like one trains one’s mind to remain positive.
So appreciate your feedback, Shiwani. β€οΈ
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Positive minds like you think of positive learned behavior. Unfortunately, we have a lot of learnes behavior that harms us too. Yes, definitely my area of interest and passion…
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Learned behaviour surely harms us… as we are discovering it is the root of most biases.
So we learn to unlearn and begin again…
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We really need to let some beliefs lie comatose, in order to move ahead.
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Yes. Learning, then unlearning that’s how one grows.
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Reblogged this on Reena Saxena and commented:
Mindfield ……. by Punam
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Thanks Reena.
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learned behavior – something to ponder on Punam. loved this – beautifully constructed
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Gina! So good to see you here! How are you, my friend?
Thank you so much.
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“poisoning the process of perception
infiltrating the inviolable memory bank” π
Superbly penned, Punam! Loved it! π
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Thanks so much, Priya. β€οΈ
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Nice to see you back, ma! I like this. I like the arrangement of the linesβthe flow and the movement. I felt as if I was spiraling down the words and thenβheels! ππ»ππ
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Nina!! So good to see you here!π€ Thank you so much. Yeah…those heels…β€οΈππΌπ
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now, you are back with a bang!!!
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ππΌ Thank you, Mich.
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Interesting read. Human mind a mystery. The words are wow. π
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Indeed, it is a mystery that most of us do not even try to solve! Thanks a lot, my dear. ππΌβ€οΈ
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My pleasure always π (Heart)
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This is gorgeous writing π
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Jude, thank you so much. π
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My pleasure
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That’s really penned so well..!ππ»π
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Thanks a lot, Akshita! ππΌβ€οΈ
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My pleasure ππ
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You’ve explained games that mind plays beautifully, Ma’am. π Missed your posts during your break, but I hope you enjoyed your break. You’ve definitely come back with a bang.
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Thanks a lot, Aishwarya! Good to see you. I had a wonderful break. So nice of you to say I was missed. I promise a month full of poetry to make up for the break.:)
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Awaiting your poems, Ma’am. π
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Thanks again. πβ€οΈ
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Awesomeness at its core.. ππΌππΌπ€πππΌππΌ
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Touched beyond words…ππΌπ€ππ
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