“कागा सब तन खाइयो
चुन चुन खाइयो मांस
दो नैना मत खाइयो
मोहे पिया मिला की आस”
(O Raven, you have searched my skeleton, and eaten all my flesh. But please do not touch these eyes as I hope to behold my Beloved.)
The above is a very famous couplet by Baba Farid.
Inspired by this couplet, which I read years ago, is my verse for Tracy’s corvid challenge.
Raven desires ravish her decadent flesh
circling hungrily
homing where the flesh is the weakest
she succumbs willingly
unmindful of the vicious cost
tasting the bittersweet sensation
of being ravaged
her skeletal self becomes
a bedraggled leftover
of longings without fruition
but her dark eyes, soulless windows
remain open, gazing unseeingly
waiting for redemption.
Wow… amazing words..Punam❣️
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Thanks a lot, dear Sarika. 💞
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My absolute pleasure dear 😇
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Absolutely gorgeous 💕🌸❤️💝🌿🌷
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Thank you so much, dear Gabriela! 🌷❤️😊💞
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My pleasure sweetheart 🌺
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Oh wow. Loved it.
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Thanks a lot, Bo.
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A very famous poem. I love your treatment of the prompt
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Ah! So you have heard about it!
Thanks so much.
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You’re welcome 😉
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ouch very haunting … and daunting as the pandemic is …
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The couplet is very haunting. And these days whatever I write, it sounds daunting like the pandemic. 😅
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yes you echo it resoundingly …
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These lines could stand alone–Stellar! “longings without fruition
but her dark eyes, soulless windows
remain open, gazing unseeingly
waiting for redemption.”
Longings without fruition…WOWZA
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My dear, thank you so much for your lovely words! Makes writing so worthwhile. ❤️
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Oh I’m so glad to know that, Punam 💖💖💖
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💞💞
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😊
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Thank you for introducing me to Baba Farid’s couplet, Punam. Your poem casts a shadow. Chilling. I liked it very much.
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Since you began the challenge, this couplet and the quotes I used last time, had been on my mind. I am glad I could write something worthy of these words. Thank you so much, Tracy. I wouldn’t have written these poems, if not for your challenge. ❤️
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Shucks, Punam. You’re welcome, but the challenge has to come to an end soon. I’ve run out of ideas!!!
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No worries. I am sure you will come up with something else. 🙂
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Oh wow! I loved the metaphors❤❤❤ Amazing😍
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Thanks a lot, Ishita. I am glad you enjoyed it. 💞🌷😘
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My pleasure Punam❤💕
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The doha took me back to school days…..but your poem was stellar. Read it all over again 👍🏻
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Radhika, I have very fond memories of the story ‘Jahanvi’ which had the couplet. I am so glad you liked this. Thank you so much, dear. 💞
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Wow Punam…the queen has spoken once again….🤗🤗🤗
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Aww Mich! 🙈🙈
Thanks, dear. 🤗❤️
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💕💕💕
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wow – that a splendid take
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Thanks a lot, dear Shantanu.
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My absolute pleasure
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dark, rich and soulful – you mesmerise me
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Thanks, Gina. You are always so good to me.
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double that back to you sweetheart
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🙏🏼❤️
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Dearest Punam, I have the opportunity again, to nominate you for another award. I absolutely LOVE your gorgeous poetry❤❤
Love and hugs❤💕
https://thoughtsresonate.home.blog/2020/06/10/the-original-outstanding-blogger-award/
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Dear Ishita, thank you so much for all the love you shower on me! I am so delighted and humbled. ❤️😘
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You are most welcome Punam😊 You deserve all of it!
❤💕
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Dark interpretation! Well written.
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Thank you so much.
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Awesome write. The lines by Baba Farid and your poem has made it a stunning combo.
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Aww! You are too kind, Kritika! Thank you so much. 🙏🏼❤️
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My pleasure always 🙂 (Heart)
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Waiting for redemption – that last line is a powerful one for me – reminds of that line from Augustine, “too late have I loved thee.”that indomitable persistence.
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Thank you for your visit and your kind comment, Paul. Being reminded of Augustine is high praise.
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I thought it was a wonderful piece.
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🙂🙏🏼
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🙂
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