Broken pieces of dreams

Day 22: Broken Pieces

I look at my skinned knees

Knees raw from crawling over

Over the jagged edges of reality

Reality which was summarily discarded

Discarded in favour of fantasy

Fantasy which shattered everything

Everything seems lost forever, but…

But now I am retrieving broken pieces of dreams

Dreams thus fragmented, you may say, would do no good

Good times alas seem so far away

Away from my here and today

Today the salt from my eyes may sting these dreams

Dreams that continue to lie prone

Prone and battered out of shape

Shape of my future splintered badly so

So I lay them away from the escarpment

Escarpment which beckons with suicidal notions

Notions that may make them fall off the precipice again

Again to be shattered and scattered all over

Over which I may cry no more but reconcile myself

Myself to the inevitability of stark truths

Truths that stare me in the face, but

But if even one dream manages to resurrect itself

Itself, of its own volition, it will be a reason to revel

Revel because dreams do keep us alive and going.

( Written for OctPoWriMo)

poetry form: Loop poetry


44 thoughts on “Broken pieces of dreams

  1. I love the loop technique. I have seldom seen anyone experiment with sustaining it over so many lines as you did here, so I was quite interested in the effect doing so had on me. I would need to read a couple more poems written in a similar loop fashion to come to any definite conclusions though, but this poem was very interesting indeed.

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  2. Oh Wow, oh Wow, oh WOW, poet queen! You do “loop” form incredibly well, effortlessly it seems. And every word resonates within me–such loveliness, and the finale, that “dreams keep us alive and going”. Truly they do…faith and dreams are what keep me intact. Bravo!

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    1. Thank you so much, dear Z! It did kind of flow on its own! I am a positive person so try to end even my darkest poems with some kind of hope. Thanks again! πŸ™‚β€οΈ


      1. Indeed your positive attitude, and desire to reflect/offer hope, are traits which make you stand out from the crowd. You’ve inspired me to tell the hard truths, but with a redemptive ending–so, many thanks to you, dear poet friend! πŸ™‚ ❀

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      2. You say such wonderfully nice things that I wonder if I truly deserve this kindness! πŸ™ˆ
        Thanks a lot. β€οΈβ€οΈπŸ™πŸΌ


      3. Of course you deserve every sincere praise!! It’s my pleasure alwaysπŸ™πŸ’™πŸ’–πŸ’–πŸ’–

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