A rain drenched evening

~ paeansunplugged

The skies have opened up suddenly

raindrops are chasing each other unrestrainedly

a cool zephyr redolent with petrichor blows pleasantly

cinereous clouds play catch and trace patterns lazily

a young lanky lad drenched to the skin

lets loose a lambada jig unmindful of his scolding kin

two girls place paper boats delicately in the puddle

a  couple of pups take shelter in a doorway and huddle

it’s a beautiful, picturesque evening

but without you, it has no meaning.

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58 thoughts on “A rain drenched evening”

  3. Oh that SLAP IN THE FACE that is the ending. I’m gonna have to explain to my girlfriend why I have a hand print on my caved-in cheek. It’s not going to be pretty… but this poem absolutely is.

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  8. Punam what a beautiful picture of life events you illustrate with your words.😊❤️🤗 Truly picturesque!…I especially loved the line “Cinereous clouds play catch and trace patterns lazily.”

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      1. but we can’t have too much if it no matter how much I love the rain I must accept that the sun must shine. beauty in your words always inspires me

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  13. I got drawn into this gorgeous rainy scene, but then left speechless by the ending

    “it’s a beautiful, picturesque evening
    but without you, it has no meaning.”

    Sometimes even the most beautiful experiences can feel a little empty without that someone who gives them meaning. I don’t know, but I found this a bit heartbreaking. Maybe because it was unexpected, and there seemed a sadness in those words.

    This poem is beautiful ❤️❤️

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    1. This one was written when hubby was not here and since he is again away, the same feeling remains. I never meant it to be a sad one but yes, the enjoyment of little joys of life is diminished a bit in the absence of a loved one.
      Thank you so much for your generous words, Rachel. I am so glad you are enjoying my rain poems. ❤️❤️

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      1. Oh!! Seems he is away a lot…. I really felt that wistfulness for his presence in this, it was as though you were caught up in the beauty of the moment, and then you remembered he wasn’t there and the joy and lightness of that moment suddenly diminished. I hope he is not away too long… hugs to you ❤️❤️

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