It begins as a whisper
a nudge, a gentle probe
then the susurration increases
a volley of queries unleashed
finally it is a herd of elephants let loose
causing a stampede trampling the mind
with questions and more questions
doubting, inquiring, interrogating and cross-examining
their intent often a suspect
till mind imploding under the
pressure of these doubting Thomases
turns into confetti scattered all over
answers often not forthcoming
frightened and paralyzed
under this relentless barrage
till one bold orphan reply pipes up in a tremulous voice
thus shocked, the shamefaced questions slink away to hide.
Wonderful!
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Thanks Sadje!
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A pleasure 😍
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I love it how the momentum of your poem matches the barrage of questions, and the poem then slows down at the end with the bold orphan’s reply. Fantastic! ❤️❤️
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I am glad that came through. Self-doubting questions have the insidious habit of crowding the mind. Thank you so much, dear.
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They sure do, often without you realising! And, it’s my pleasure!
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Wow – you create a movie with your poetry – the reply at the end was beautiful
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Oh, my! Thanks a lot, Shantanu. You are too kind.
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My absolute pleasure
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there is real movement in this one!
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Thanks, Kate dear.
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my pleasure Punam!
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I love how you started out so calm and ended very strong..
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Thank you so much, Mich.
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great buildup, like stampede in lion king. but this might as well be the lament of the one with no answers, and a wishful exit towards the end.
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I never give up on hope…thus the wishful ending! Thanks for comparing it to Lion King, though I haven’t watched the latest version.
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the movie is not great, and I love questions, dont give me hope gimme answers 😀
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🤔 Answers are always there but the big question is are they the right answers?
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is there anything that is right and wrong? questions are just questions, like men are men
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You are right…questions are like men and answers like women. Now go figure!!
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Great help, yet again! Also, I stop when women and figure are mentioned together, whatever I do I end up being called shallow.
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I know, I know,how I help you through your existential crisis! Well, you have certainly shown your depth!
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Exclamations always lead to suspicion and further questions, but like I said, I must stop!
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Lol I was just pulling your leg but you presumed I was pulling the rug.
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not presumed, was was suspicious, exclamations carry a lot of meaning these days and that I learnt the hard way recently
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Here you can say what you want without being judged.
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I like being judged
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What a conundrum you are!! 🤦🤦
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haha not really, I hope. I think deep down we all do. It is like feedback on the script that you keep writing about yourself
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Not really. Feedback is necessary for course correction but judging others usually has a moral connotation and…
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yeah that’s the issue with the judges not the judged 😎
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Yeah…the judges impose their morality on the judged
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not impose, but expose their own
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Yes, shishya…both
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Do judge me 😛
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I have very high moral standards! 😎
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so I fail?
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Till now I was not judging you but henceforth I wil, so you earned reprieve on all your previous statements! 😇
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😂👍
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Very wise! If you use only emojis you will not fall within the ambit of moral turpitude. 😎
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Oh I see a judge too eager for an early hearing, shaant gadadhari bheem
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Judge ko judgement dene ki jaldi hai. 😂😂
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for some reason i thought of the Emperor’s New Clothes where one child was bold enough to be truthful
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Gina, I like the analogy! So apt! Thanks a lot, dear.
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Reminds me of some research I read, learning to ask better questions. Nothing worse than herd mentality.
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I agree.
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