Today, I’d like to challenge you to write a poem that, like The Color of Pomegranates and “City That Does Not Sleep,” incorporates wild, surreal images. Try to play around with writing that doesn’t make formal sense, but which engages all the senses and involves dream-logic.
Nightmare
Always, always I am falling
in a deep abyss
in slowest of slow motion
flailing arms and silent screams
I wake up sweating
heart pounding loud
snakes of suspicion slithering
up my chest choking the chipmunks
in my brain always,
always I slide back into the partisan dream
showing sepia-toned snapshots of swirling snowflakes
transforming into ugly beasts
exhorting me to finish my exam
and I realise with a start
I submitted an empty sheet.
Done so well 👍
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Thank you Sadje! 🙏
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You’re welcome 😊
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Ah, such a fantastic write and I love the alliteration as well as the surreal imagery.
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Not my kind of writing so thanks a lot for the validation.
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You are kindly welcome.
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Done exactly as per the prompt instructions, you don’t seem to be someone who would submit an empty sheet, even in the dreams.
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Ah, dreams are usually out of control. Thank you so much for your faith in my ability to write.
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..and ability to following instructions, I must reiterate.
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Yes, that too. But not always.
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Excellent Punam! 🙂💕
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Thank you, Christine! 🙂💞
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O wow.. what great choice of words.. you plan and play with the prompts so so well.. you simply amaze me.. 😇💕
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🙏🙏 and your words always humble me! Thank you so much, Debby. 🤗❤️
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😘💕🤗😇
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Brilliant!👏👏
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Thanks Richa! 💞
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lol love it … you nailed it Punam!
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Thanks Kate! 😀
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most welcome!
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A student’s dream … where you start
with 100%, and they only deduct marks
for incorrect answers that you really
needn’t answer. We could all sleep easier
if life was like that 😎
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If only life was like that! 😥
I hope someone who can make a difference is reading this.
Thanks David.
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On a wing & a prayer, Punam🙏
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It doesn’t seem to matter how many years since being a student, these anxiety dreams keep on coming. I know just what you mean. Wonderfully done ❤️
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Oh yes! The other day a friend was lamenting she still dreams that she prepared for chemistry exam only to find out at the examination centre that it is actually physics on that day!! Thanks so much! ❤️❤️
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You are welcome Punam ❤️❤️
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Beautiful how you wrote this ‘nightmare’
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Thank you so much, my dear. 🙂
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You’re welcome 🙂
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Wow amazing
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Thank you so much.
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haha – I have such dreams as well -😊
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Gosh! Terrible na!
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I know. 😱
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😂😂
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I love that aliteration, snakes of suspcion slitehring, so true.
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Thank you so much, Paul. I am glad you enjoyed it.
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I still get such dreams.And that feeling you have expressed it just so well .
No doubt you are my prompt queen🤗❤
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Thank you, my dear! 🤗💞
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snakes of suspicion slithering – oh this was such a wicked good line!
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Yes, that came out pretty well! 😀
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